July 21st, 2012 at 10:41pm
More Than This. - Comments
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Awww!July 21st, 2012 at 08:30pm
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I love this story more and more every time that you update! :DJuly 21st, 2012 at 05:52am
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Ugh as soon as he said he barely knew him I guessed it was Alex! :) I'm such a good reader fan person! (is that a real adjective?) This was sooooo good and I'm sooo happy you updated now I can't wait for Liam's POV next which will be epic!!! :) I'm squealing here! >.< I love you guys, never give up on me okay? *smiles* and *hugs*July 21st, 2012 at 02:02am
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Poor both of them. Liam needs to get over his whole reputation thing, but who could blame him? Witht he way his parents are...goodness.July 20th, 2012 at 06:28pm
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I wonder how he got the pictureJuly 2nd, 2012 at 02:57am
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Is Dev gonna end up with Alex?? I don't know why but I just had that feeling. Anyway I love this <3July 1st, 2012 at 10:19pm
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Interesting....let the games begin.June 30th, 2012 at 07:55am
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Holt, ugh I don't like him lol. But then Liam should have been more nicer to Riley and to everyone really and he wouldn't have so many enemies! Jackson was never really his friend in my opinion and I think Holt showed Jackson the picture which is why he was avoiding Liam. And I can't wait til Riley hears about that confrontation. Lol This was such a awesome chapter!!! (And fewer spelling errors!!! YAY YOU!!!!!)
And your a very welcome! I am always eager to help and support you in anyway possible. Because you are awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I think the next chapter is going to be super interesting!!! Maybe Riley will go talk to Liam? Or just decide he doesn't want to deal with him anymore? Ugh I am sooooo excited and I am sorry this is a really long comment! I just get so HAPPPYYYYYY!!!!! Okay I am done lol maybe....
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Okay lol now I am.June 29th, 2012 at 10:30pm -
I -knew- something was gonna happen. Sly little asshole. Of course the kid that follows Jackson around took a picture. What a creep. -.- He should be criticized for even having a picture of two guys kissing on his phone if that's the case. XD I really expected Holt to do that~ Anyway, I really liked this chapter~ <3 It was awesome~ I don't like Holt so much, so I think he deserved it. >:3 Bwah hahahahahaha~!!!
Update soon!June 29th, 2012 at 07:25pm -
Woah.June 29th, 2012 at 05:10pm
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Blah blah blah, I need mooooaaaarrrrrr. D: Blah blah blah, good comment, blah blah. x] Sorry. Lawlz. No, the story is great. I like it. Recs and Subs for you~~!!! <3June 28th, 2012 at 10:43am
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I hope you get rid of your writer's block soon! Can't wait for the next chapter though (:June 27th, 2012 at 06:02am
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I think both chapters were good, short but good and there were no errors from what I saw lol. I have some ideas for your story that may help your writer's block! I don't know if you'll like them....but it is worth the try huh?! Stay Awesome!!!June 27th, 2012 at 05:57am
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I like Devin, but he needs to be with Liammmmmmmmmmm.June 27th, 2012 at 05:34am
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Devin's heart is in the right place :') Poor Riley thoughJune 27th, 2012 at 03:18am
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:( sad face for LiamJune 17th, 2012 at 02:32pm
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Y U NO SMARTER?!June 15th, 2012 at 09:02pm
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This story has a good plot, but the spelling (I am not a great speller either) and grammar errors are throwing me off. Every now and then I can understand, but it seems like the writing is too simple. And your switching tenses from present to past alot, it started with past, so I got a bit confused. This also needs more description and emotion to it, it seems like your just writing and not feeling the words your writing. If you re-read the story you should see what I mean. However, as the story goes on the writing style gets much more emotional and seems less rushed, which is a very good thing but should take place at the beginning of the story so you don't lose readers.
Liam and Riley are a very complicated pair, I love your story for them. Maybe you should go in to more deatil about Riley's mother and how she treated him (When I say that I mean flashbacks or of him confessing this to Liam, however you chose to do so.) Devin is a very happy character, and I think his story should have a little depth too especially since he comforts Riley. And Alex, I like his role as the seemingly creepy all knowing character but some form of his life should be revealed as well. I can't wait to see where Liam and Riley will end up. I think this story is very plotted. And you don't have to take my advice i was just offering friendly criticism! But I hope you update soon because the writing style doesn't confuse me at this point, which is a good deal.June 15th, 2012 at 08:37pm -
He's an idiot...nuff sedJune 15th, 2012 at 06:16pm
YOU SPRUNG THAT ONE ON US <3
Alex and Riley that is so effing cute (: