The Jamestown Virginia School for Gifted Minors - Comments

This has been on my comment swap for awhile and I've finally gotten to reviewing it. Sorry for the delay.

You're summary is great and you have very great detail and grammar. I really like the layout because the colors mesh well. I hope you continue it soon.

I thought the story was captivating. A little too much swearing between the cab driver and Lina tho. It didn't make sense that he would swear so often, especially in front of a young lady. It's just, ya know, food for thought.

Hello there. :) I was brought here from comment swap and I'm glad I did. I didn't really like the layout but I didn't hate it either. The story is written pretty well and the summary pulled me in right from the start. You described everything and I'm wondering how the characters will develop. Keep up the great work and share your imagination with me and your friends. XD

This is interesting. I've only had time to read the first chapter and the summary of course, but it's good. In some spots of your chapter you seem to have an absent shift key. But that's okay, just need a little revising. The layout is good because you can read it, but the colors (brown and green) make me think of trees, which doesn't flatter your story. No connection. Keep writing, darling. This will be very lovely.

Hello, I wanted to post this on here to just so you guys would see it. If it's okay I'd like to join the story. I read that ya'll were looking for another person a while back and I'm just wondering if that offer is still there.
Message me or something about it.
Thanks :)

First of all, i love your summary! it is very captivating which makes me want to read even more.
Second of all, your grammer is great, which is a releif because people can write stories on mibba, and not have a clue of what they are saying.
Third of all, your descriptions and dialogue flow very nicely. Some people aren't able to do that. You are a great writer, and this is a breath of fresh air. Nothing like i've ever read! i also like the change of character POV.
keep up the good work.

I actually really enjoyed the summary and it made me very interested to continue reading. I also found the layout to be very appealing. The story also seams to be one of your own although it seams a little familiar... oh right LIFE. Keep all of that in mind as I say that the first chapter was a little confusing. I thought that this would be a story about boundaries but 80 odd people started drinking in the same room? Oh well I actually kind of like this. I also am surprised there are no other comments. Hope you like your first one!