No Giving Up When You're Young And You Want Some - Comments

Defiantly more! :) xoxo

i want more soon please

Aww cute, love the hinting :) x

Loved it! Update soon(:

The fact it's this one huge thing really turns me off. I would have liked to see the dialog seperated not all together like that. And that their is actual paragraphs. Not just the huge thingy.

I have to say I love this story, they're such a cute couple! Please update soon :3 x

There is no such thing as too much detail. As a fellow writer on mibba i say they can deal with it. MORE DETAIL!! lol no really the story is really great! I love it!

it is so good! cant wait to read more! dont worry about all the technical stuff and typos an shit. just write because its what you like to do. i think that someone should like it and give you advice on the content of the story, what it's about and stuff rather than tell you all the things youre doing wrong with grammar. we're all human, we can't be perfect. write because you like to, and dont give up because of one person(:

You should probably run this through a spell check and grammar check just because I'm noticing quite a few typos and errors, particularly i's not being capitalized.

I'm not really a fan of so much description of what the character is doing with her clothes and hair. Especially the desciption of her piercings and tattoos. I don't even know why I'm supposed to like the character yet, but I'm bombarded with what she looks like. I prefer description spread out through chapters, after the reader has gotten a chance to know the character's personality a little bit.

I think you should take a little more time with this piece to write it a little slower paced with less mistakes so we can focus more on the story and less on the improvements.

I rule in the comment department ... i deserve a cookie the size of my house! ;)

hurray new chapter andy is a sweetheart

Andy's gonna leave la for her how cute but what about the rest of his band?

So I have no idea who Alec is but great chapter

He he I'm special! Pppfftt :p to all the silent readers. So as you know I've been reading this since day one and I have no idea who this mystery guy is ... it could be because of my pain pills but I'm completely lost when it comes to this dude.

I asked one of my friends to write a chapter for Dear God for me since my left hand is in a cast that goes from my fingers almost to my elbow so that should be out in a day or two and I've been working on a new chapter for we stitch these wounds since I got out of surgery, but it takes a while to write due to pain meds and having to type with one hand.

I can't wait for some more chapters I really want to know who this guy is! You're doing a great job with this story sweetie!

lol she just totally passed out on him ... i don't think i would be able to do that with Andy right there. Can't wait for more!

Great chapter can't wait to read more! i wonder where Andy will take her on this date

I don't like cliff hangers! Can't wait for the next chapter I hope she didn't cut to deep

Aww I got a shout out lol. I loved the chapter can't wait for more!

Oh I hope she's okay. Can't wait to read more!

I lost 14 chapters and about 70 subscribers when the site crashed and I have yet to get them back. I lost a lot of inspiration when that happened and I'm still working on getting it back. Some people are just assholes. Apparently you have a lot of silent readers seeing how I'm the only one with comments on here, but as long as people are reading that's all that matters. Maybe they deleted their mibba account all together. You're not doing anything wrong sweetie