Let's Get These Teen Hearts Beating Faster - Comments

Please update! I don't want this story to be abandoned!

Love it!!

Please update soon! I really love this story!

@ Hold.On.Till.May i just updated it so tell me what you think :)

Welcome back! I hope everything is ok with you! And thank you so much for the new update! I really hope Brendon and Dakota talk very soon and get back together! I love it! Update soon!

Hope you all liked the update!

Do you plan on continuing this story? :)

I don't mean to be a super jerk or anything by saying this, but your first paragraph was seriously...I don't know, it was too much to put into a story right off the bat. Rape isn't something small, I'm sure you know that, and telling about it in a story is an ordeal that takes time, not one sentence all rushed up in the first paragraph of the VERY first chapter.

Your main character takes the reader off guard by just sprinting up and out the door after being raped for what she seems to say is the hundredth or so time. I don't know...it's just very unsettling to me.

You also tend to switch tenses in your writing a lot. One second you're saying "the teacher came over," and the next you're writing the characters thoughts, as if the story is being written through stream of consciousness "I just hope that Brendon, I mean Mr. Urie, likes it."

Remember, I'm not trying to be hateful or critique you harshly but maybe you might think about having someone look over this and help you a bit?

I don't mean to be a super jerk or anything by saying this, but your first paragraph was seriously...I don't know, it was too much to put into a story right off the bat. Rape isn't something small, I'm sure you know that, and telling about it in a story is an ordeal that takes time, not one sentence all rushed up in the first paragraph of the VERY first chapter.

Your main character takes the reader off guard by just sprinting up and out the door after being raped for what she seems to say is the hundredth or so time. I don't know...it's just very unsettling to me.

You also tend to switch tenses in your writing a lot. One second you're saying "the teacher came over," and the next you're writing the characters thoughts, as if the story is being written through stream of consciousness "I just hope that Brendon, I mean Mr. Urie, likes it."

Remember, I'm not trying to be hateful or critique you harshly but maybe you might think about having someone look over this and help you a bit?

update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Please let Dakota and Brendon get back together! Update soon!

I understand making him, not perfect but this makes him really completely unlikeable.

AHHHH that made me sad aww :( what a douche canoe

I about had a heart attack when you said red hair. It's kinda pathetic that I just assumed it was Gerard! But Oh Em GEE(no pun intended...) that was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!((:

This is awesome!!!! Gerard Way for the win!!!!!!

Please update soon! I really want Dakota and Brendon to get back together! Please let them get back together and work everything out! I am happy your friend is feeling better! Update soon!

What?! Update soon!!!!!

God I love this. need more updates

I love this. I love Brendan. I will be stalking is story.

Please update soon! I think they are going to do great having two babies! They are going to be great parents! I hope they get married! She should face her stepdad and stand up to him! Update soon!