Woah! That was a real shocker! They are going to have twin girls! I really think they can handle twin because Brendon seems like the type of guy who loves kids! I would really love to see them get married! He would be a great husband to her! She should also face her stepfather in court and stand up to him! I love the new update! Update soon!
This story's pretty interesting. I didn't read all the way through because of the incorrect formatting (it hurts my eyes and makes me lose my place), but besides that my only other complaint is a couple of minor grammatical/spelling errors. Keep up the good work and hopefully you update soon so your readers can enjoy the story more.
No way :D name (well it's probably WAYYYY to late) but Sam LOL (I really don't care, as long as it's cute and unique, scratch that, this is so amazing I don't care period) and I wasn't guessing actually :P I just pointed out something I would want to happen, but YEAH BUDDY!
There is definitely a lot of drama, but it's good, and makes the story great! Gets kind of hard to keep up with it, but that makes you want to focus on it even more. And I agree with the comment below, I would put space between the paragraphs. Just to break it up a little.
Like seriously, for eight chapters, that was a butt-ton of drama! But I loved it! I'm a huge fan of drama and dark things, so I was almost glued to the screen absorbing all of the drama you poured into the story. Great job! I noticed a few grammar mistakes, but we're all human so no harm done.
The one thing I would change is the way the paragraphs are formatted. There's supposed to a space between them :)
oh, and I would love for the baby to be a girl. Baha.
Thank you for the update! I really loved it! I would love for the baby to be a girl! I would really like to see Dakota confront her stepfather in a court room at his trial. She should at least give her father a chance to explain more about him leaving and not being there. I really would love to see Brendon and Dakota get married! Thank you for the picture of Brendon! And I really hope your friend is doing better and he gets well soon! Update soon!
Dakota! Gah a girl would be cute; but I would love to see what Brendon would do with a boy (shocking twist at the last minute...TWINS) but yeah cute, and wow what happened in the me...oh are you okay? plus I just got on here; I hope your friend makes it through (okay bad time, but if you need a song Save You by Simple Plan works) STILL I really hope your friend makes it through and tuff as ever; I wish him luck, 'cause he will make it through ('kay hun)
I feel bad for Dakota no one deserves that, and to find out that her friend was also raped by that ass hole just pisses me off and I hope that while he’s in prison he gets raped ten times a day, and her mom’s a bitch for letting it happen and for not telling her about her father. I mean what kind of selfish bitch does that? I think that Brendon is good for her, can’t wait to see how her relationship with her father goes keep up the good work
I'm not even a fan of PATD (comment swap brought me here) but I still knew by the very title that it would be a PATD fic :]
I absolutely love the name you've used - Dakota probably because I love the song Dakota by the Stereophonics but also because it's unique. I've never once read a story which involves a character with this name so I love how original you've been with the name!
I also love how you use song titles/lyrics for the chapters. They usually set the mood for the chapter before you've even started reading :]
I can tell that a lot of thought has gone into this story and whilst I don't usually read PATD fiction, I really like what you've done with this story :]
Good luck with the progression of this story and for the rest of your future work! :)
For having a rough patch, you did fantastic at updating quickly! I think girl..... But honestly, it's whatever your gut says. I really like this chapter and I'm very excited to see how things go with her Dad! And her Mom!
I am really happy that Dakota and her mom are making progress so that thing will get better! I am also really excited to see her talking to her dad! I really think she should have a girl! I hope your friend is doing better and getting well! Great chapter! Update soon!
I think it should be a little girl, most of the stories I read that involve the main character having a kit always have a boy. I think Marina, Isadora, Aurora, Deanna or Ivy would be a nice name. But if you do choose a boy, I think Jordan, Beck, Sheen, Castiel or Damiean would be nice. I'm sorry about your friend:(
This is awesome! I lovee it! Thanks for the update! This is really good. By the way, I'm really sorry about your friend... I completely understand spending a lot of time with him. :(
The name I'm in love with that can be used for a girl or boy is Rain. I also like Elizabeth for a girl or Scarlett, or Samantha. For a boy I like Jude, Luke, Sam, or Castiel. I'm really sorry about your friend and I understand if you need time. I absolutely luv the story by the way!
This is getting really good! I am shocked that her stepdad raped her best friend, but I wasn't too shocked to find out the Cassie's son was her stepdads! I am really excited to see what happens when Dakota visits he mom in jail! Great chapter! Update soon! And i'm really sorry to hear about your friend. I hope he is going to be okay and he gets well soon!