An Ever Lasting Love - Comments

I like where this is going... There are some minor errors that can be fixed pretty easily. There should be quotation marks: " " around the dialogue, instead of ' .' There are several punctuation mistakes, but those are ignore-able. Fan Fiction is my go to - especially when it's Avenged Sevenfold! I enjoyed the first few chapters, good luck with your future writing.

Heyy, comment swapper here...
first of, band-fics are exactly the kind of story I avoid as I dont like the idea of 'real life'characters, the story itself has potential, especially for fans of the band and Jimmy ( R.I.P) however, the font itself is quite difficult to read and within the first chapter you make a few errors, such as capital letters and apostrophe errors... but a qucik check through and they can be easily sorted...

good luck with your writing <3

Okay, first off I would like to say that I think this story has potential. The font makes it a little difficult to read, but I can get past that. What I cant get over, is the grammar and general errors. I'm kind of a nazi when it comes to spelling and whatnot, but I simply cannot enjoy a story when it has so many errors. The dialogue is a tad robotic and sometimes hard to follow. Overall its a nice story, keep practising and keep an eye out for errors. 4/10

awww its so sweet and gooshy. I cant wait to see how tour goes.

30 chapters I say D: It can't be only one more chapter :'(

You actually made me tear up a bit -.-

You actually made me tear up a bit -.-

:) awww

The dancing was hilarious!!! You are such a good writer, I hope you update soon.

NAWWW... again! again! I vote for a second update :)

Thi is such a sweet story! I hope you update soon. I love Diana and Jimmys relationship.

Kay, update again :D

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I have to agree with the other about punctuation etc. Make sure you re-read the chapters before you put them up or let someone else read them for you. You've definitely got potential, but it's not something I would have read if I hadn't gotten here through the swap thingy, because it's not my fandom or whatever you want to call it.
Keep up the good work.

The layout is relatively easy to read from.
Ax7 stories seem to be very cliche anymore, so make sure you differ yourself from many other fanfiction authors.
There are many grammatical errors in the first chapter, mainly in the dialogue. Go back and revise or your story could be reported.
Nonetheless you have a great amount of potential.

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I'm not a huge Avenged Sevenfold fanfiction reader so I never would have read this if it weren't for cs. But it's a nice change, the story has an interesting plot. It's a good story!

I noticed right away though, that you didn't punctuate very well. There were a lot of run on sentences. It's not a huge deal, but it's a little bothersome. Especially with all the Grammar Nazi's out there! So you might want to to a little bit of revising. Good job on the story though!(:

Only read the first chapter Tegan. Sounds good tho

No you dont amber :P

Sorry to ruin it for everyone but i know exactly what is going to happen, and she says no. So where is my prize? What do i get for guessing right ^>^

the story line seems fine, but you might want to go through this again. You used a lot of small "i's" for "I" and the missing ' in "I'll" for example gives the word a new meaning, also there was a couple of other misused words, "s" and "r" where there shouldn't be after "you" and some weird word arrangements.

I'm not trying to be mean or anything, just thought you might like to know. The story seems good, it just needs some editing from my point of view (maybe get a beta?). If you disagree then just ignore this (getting very long) comment and go on as you did before. I just thought I let you know. :3

Where is sweet Tegan gone? Who is this sexual person?!

Anyway nice nice chapter, they should just do it but niice :P