Beautiful Mistake. - Comments

First off, just want to say that I love the layout and think it’s absolutely gorgeous. Overall, I liked the format of a letter style because I always find them interesting in the way it’s able to tell a story. I really, really liked the plot of this, of how their love was so innocent and beautiful and then it becomes what could have been a bitter story but is more bittersweet, in a way. The quote was incorporated really nicely but I wish there was a bit more connection to the picture itself. Nonetheless, I enjoyed that this piece had a different formatting to other entries in this contest and was very interesting to read.

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I completely and whole heartedly agree with nine crimes. above. This was an excellent one-shot. I can't begin to point out everything I loved about it. The resolve at the end, for the girl to just let things be, tends to be an emotion that often betrays the previous emotions of the story but you were consistent through out and I thank you for that.
This is the cleanest one-shot I've read in a very long time. Ah! So enjoyable!

I really, really enjoyed this. It's enormously well-written. And I wanted to give you a full-on review because I just felt... well, yes. Anyway:

Layout — so lovely. It's refreshing to see a layout that isn't all neon-green background with red writing. The colors work really well with the picture you used. The only suggestion I would make is maybe having a little bit of space between the edge of the story area and the words themselves. Other than that, it's just about flawless!

Storyline — I felt this way really clever. I'm not just saying that either, because I really enjoy non-typical sad stories, and there's just this... honesty to your story that's really very powerful. It was very effective for you to write it this way, with little snippets of the backstory between the boy and the girl, and the overall length. It was beautiful. Not to mention, I really loved how you didn't even use any names—save a reference to James Dean. It leaves this air of anonymity to it, makes me feel like this could be anyone, really, in life. It could happen to any girl. It probably has, even.

Style — this is my favorite part. Truly phenomenal. You have a very wonderful, understated simplicity to your writing. I adore how it was written as a letter, and I felt that it tied in really well with your quote. Simply put, this was wonderful.

I hope this review makes up for the atrocity that no-one else has commented! This one-shot really does deserve more feedback. It was beautiful. Thank you.