What My Heart Held - Comments

I,m very impressed with your amount of detail and describing that you included. It's something i admire in writing and something i personally wish i was better at myself. I also feel like you described both sides of depression well with the characters kyle and andy. I am not familiar with the two to comment on the accuracy of their personalities but im very pleased with how believable it was. very well written. I would read more of your stories.

You definitely should be proud of it! Despite the fact that it wasn't very short, I read it in few minutes. Andy (as I understood that's the main character's name), however, seemes a bit silly with whining how he's the outsider but instantly feeling better, when he gets laid. But the text itself is well-written, so I think it would be fair to say that you did a great job :)

So apparently my first comment on this didn't work so,
I really, really loved this one shot. Your use of language is excellent in here. I love the picture at the top, for some reason it made me burst out laughing!

I hope you won that competition, you really deserve it.

well fuck

Great oneshot, I really love this! <3

Wow!!! That's cool! Really!Thaks for such a great story! Good luck in writing! ;)

LOL. I PICTURED THIS AND I LAUGHED SO HARD. THANK YOU SO MUCH. THIS IS PERFECT.

I adore oneshots, so I was so very glad when I finally got one. Your layout makes this a tad hard to read. The words go over the photo when you scroll, which is difficult. The oneshot was wonderfully well written, though! You have perfect flow and captured the moment really well. I loved the ending. For whatever contest this is for, I hope you win. You’re a lovely writer.

I can't read the story because the picture obscures the words. I'm sorry. I really would like to read it, but that's quite the impossible feat given the current layout. I would suggest putting a solid background behind your text so, that your readers can easily read it. Anyways, if you do change the layout, I would definitely be interested in giving this another shot.

I'm not usually a fan of one-shots but this is the perfect example of why I'll read anything. I really like the ending, the closing sentence in particular and the whole thing flowed very well. Hope you win doll <3

I love it !
Hope you wim