Dreams After Dark - Comments

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I really like the whole idea behind this project, writing about the different "monsters" that terrorize kids. I liked "The Boggler" monster you made up. A monster that eats your toes? Eek! I've never ever been able to sleep with my leg hanging over the side of the bed; maybe I've always been afraid there was a boggler in my closet? lol. And the doll one was kind of creepy. It made me think of this ring around the rosie doll I had that sang if you held both of her hands; she would randomly start singing at night when I wasn't playing with her, it scared the shit out of me. But all in all I really enjoyed what I read here. The one thing I didn't like was the layout; the little girl in the background is covered up by the story on my screen.

Wow, these are some pretty deep stuff, especially the tooth fairy one. It takes all of the nice childhood stories and twists them in an evil way, very creative and imaginative, also, great descriptions if I may add.

Well... sucks to be the little kids in this story. Too bad I'm already grown up and out of their grasp *sunglasses*

No, this was very entertaining to read and very scary for me because there was/is something that lives in my closet. So, thanks for that, my dear writer. This was awesome and I loved the layout and I want you to keep writing this and keep up the awesome work. Carry on ^^

I loved it.

That was lovely, I love the simplistic descriptions making everything easy to understand.

Wow blech

NOW we are one. No k.

Alright, the doll mind raped my mind. Update soon.

UPDATE ASH!!

These are freaky stories but I really liked them. They are very well written and very imaginative =)

AH D: A scary story. That would just be my luck. As if being afraid of the dark at 18 years old wasn't enough to leave me with scars.

I have to say, though, that it is very well written, and it gives that really creepy vibe. You know, for people who like that kind of thing... and not sissy 18 year old's.

The only thing that bugged me for your story was your layout. Well, not the whole thing, just the picture in the background. Since you can't see the whole picture, it was kind of just distracting to have it there. But other than that, you are doing well my friend!

Wow! Creepy as hell.
I love it! So awesome and wicked. : D

First- I didn't like the layout much, maybe try a new one?

Second- I have always been afraid of someone watching me at night through a window or something. And the Boggler really got me thinking someone was watching me.

Third- I like the unique layout names and how they make a pyramid. c:

ooooh third chapter resubscribing!

It's quite apparent that I should not be reading horror type stories before bed. My imagination tends to run wild afterwards, haha. Anyways, moving on to the review!

My first critique is that the background and font colors were really offset and really hurt my eyes. A white - or off white - background with maybe a dark font color would be best and would attract more readers. Just a suggestion c:

Okay, so... having my feet eaten off in the middle of the night has always been a massive, massive fear of mine. I should mention that I'm 19 and I still think that there's some creepy thing living under my bed and he's going to eat my feet if they dangle over or pop out from under my blanket. I can actually imaging the Boggler crawling out of my closet and eating my digits. Dang, I seriously should stop reading stuff like this before bed, lmfao.

You really captured the very horror and fear that childhood nightmare stories have. I totally cringed and had to shake the images out of my head, lol. Anyways, I really, really enjoyed this! You've done a great job writing these; however, I do agree with the other commentors that the chapters could be a little longer and descriptive, as they do sound a bit stiff. All in all, brilliant job! <3

I agree with writingdead. I wish the ending to chapter two was longer and a bit more descriptive. But, I really enjoyed it! The Blogger was really creepy. Even now I sometimes get freaked out if my feet dangle off the side of my bed. I think you captured some childhood horrors very well! Keep going with it! Continue writing, please. You do a fantastic job!!! :)

I love how this is set up like a collection of short stories, instead of one continuing story. It keeps things interesting. Also, the boggler is creepy as f***. I've always been terrified of the monster from under the bed eating my toes off in the night, and always keep my feet covered when I sleep. So that story literally made me cringe and shudder. So, you know, awesome job with that. :) I love me a good horror story or two, and I find they're lacking on Mibba, so this really just kind made my day.

Wow! Just wow!
This give me chills.
I love your writing style.
Love it! Can't wait for next update. :D

First of all, I love me a creepy tooth-faery, chapter two was awesome. I wish that the ending had been a tincey-wincey bit longer though. Your style of writing is very descriptive, which I love. The Boggler, the glass-toothed, toe-thief, he's cool. You defiantly portrayed that childish innocence very well. So all in all, very good, I can't wait for the next chapter. ~m

I've actually never heard of a boggler so the first chapter was really interesting to me.
I really liked the second paragraph where you talked about the boy stirring in his sleep. All of the words flowed together perfectly and it painted a vivid picture of a small boy in sleep, which added to his innocence and attached me to the character more.
I don't know if all bogglers have glass teeth, but I thought it was really creepy that you described them that way. It was very nice word choice.
And, I just read your author's note that said you made up the boggler.... hahaha.

I really enjoyed the second chapter. The descriptions in this one were even better than the first.
I like the way you take simple things and use uncommon word combinations for them, such as: crown of her head and tip of her nose.
The chapter was very creepy and I thought it was creepier than the first, even though the tooth fairy isn't as scary.

Overall, the story is very good so far! Hopefully you keep writing the tales of more creepy characters!