This is... interesting. Comment swap brought me here, and, seeing that this is a fanfic about people I don't know, I'm doing my best to keep up, haha. The only crticism I feel I have some right to give you is that the writing gets a little too informal (mostly in the beginning, it gets better from there, actually). Like with the repetitive 'Yeah.' 's. It takes the reader away from the story, and makes the narrator a little less interesting to be honest.
Other than that, people seem to like it, so good luck! :)
Lemme just say this: The status up top is hilarious. I am saying that everywhere now. I told my best guy friend to calm his tits and he stared at me with wide eyes, like, "Dafuq?!"...And the rest is history. -_-
I like hearing this from both Frank and Gerard' point of view, and Mikey sitting on the yellow chair makes him my automatic best friend. He's awkwardly cheery, has only one smoke compared to the other two's pack, and sits on yellow chairs. Oh, hell, yes. And Dawn. Yes, Dawn. That's a great name for a guy. Seriously. And Gerard, ooh, you know you want you some Frank. And Frank, calm down, he'll like you eventually. Have you seen the layout, darling? Anyhow, continue on, friends! I wanna see where this goes, oh, yes.
This is so awesome so far <3 But I hope it's not to much to ask, but could you change the layout? Because it gets me cross-eyed because of all the squares in the background... Just asking, because you don't have to, I'll still read the story anyways... Update soon!