7 Years - Comments

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First off, I really, really, really love the layout! It's simple and not overpowering. Your writing is absolute perfection, I don't know really what else to say, you're doing well! Good luck xx.

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Firstly, you shouldn't have a period in the title, it should just be "Seven Years". That's another thing, I would use words for numbers, insted of the actual numbers, as it gives the story a more professional look. The first sentence is kind of clunky, and doesn't read well. It needs a comma somewhere but I don't even know where. Maybe try splitting it into two smaller sentences? you need to add the word "which" to your second sentence after 2am. I really loved the sentence, "we can escape the lows and get lost in all the high." The sentence that starts your 6th paragraph doesn't make any sense whatsoever. The story was very upsetting, in a good way, if that makes sense at all to you. I found the ending to be sort of rushed, like the story just died out at the end. The last sentence is fine, I just don't think you need the other two with it. Hope this was helpful.

This is a great start to the story first shot into the mix of things. It can definitely go anywhere from here, which I am extremely hopeful for. The lack of complete detail, with a few harsher descriptions leaves a perfect ambiance and characterization to everything. I'm hoping to see more from you, possibly a deeper look into this dreadfully honest world of yours.

First of all, I don't think you should have a period in the title of the story. The Mibba editors really frown upon that, but it's an easy fix!
You should also think about making a custom layout to make the story more appealing to readers!
I think you wrote this story very well and the plot is really good, so far. Just keep it up!!

Wow. That was beautifully written. It was sad, yes. It was unbelievably sad, but it was excellent. I really liked how i t was written using 'you'. It made it much more personal, and much more heartbreaking. I wish this was more than just a one-shot because I would definitely be subscribing. I'll have to check out more of your stuff, because this was amazing! Keep up the good work, and keep writing!

Really good! The overall idea is nice, and, telling from the first chapter, you can take this story really far. The writing is amazing. With an idea like this, a lot of people couldn't really do as well with it. You did really well. Good job!