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My favorite thing about this drabble is the regret. For some reason, I feel regret rub off each word in the story. Men trying to drown everything away, sad songs about being ordinary. It's like a pub packed with all these forgotten dreams and washed out goals. All but for one person - for reasons I can't understand I feel like the only extraordinary person in the pub is the singer. The man with a beard as rough as steel wool and eyes as pale as milk. The line that I loved the most must be: 'his voice was hoarse and worn with years of smoking.' Because I could actually hear his voice. Like FairyFeller said, I perceive him as a wandering musician.

Excellent job.

For as short as this is, I know it's a drabble, it's very powerful. I love the description.

Very nicely done!
I agree with FairyFeller that you described the guitarist perfectly, and I could practically hear how his voice sounded when you described it as: "hoarse and worn with years of smoking".
Great job on this. (:

This is brilliant! You've captured the pub perfectly in such a short space, and there's a real feeling of regularity and famililarity. The imagery of the guitarist is perfect; I can easily picture a kind of wandering musican.