Letters from the Dead - Comments

From Comment Swap here, and I have to say I love the layout to your story. Your story, all in all is good. It's unique. I'm not much of a My Chemical Romance fan, but I used to be. The story on it's own is very well written. I didn't see many grammar or spelling mistakes, and if there were any, that is.

Anyways, keep up the great work! :)

(Comment Swap) I really enjoy this story, just read 3 chapters, but your writing is so artistic, and the story is fabulous from what I have read. The only thing I would change is the layout, in my opinion I think it could look better, with the picture at the beginning disappearing when you scroll down. I'm not really into the whole darkness theme, but I enjoyed readig the first couple chapters! But other than that I think that you are an amazing author!

Hey! I've been brought here thanks to the comment swap.
I've gotta be honest, I'm not really a My Chemical Romance fan, so I wasn't too excited to read about this at first. I was planning on reading the first five chapters and then write my comment, but I ended up reading until chapter 10 :P
I think you chose a really interesting theme and plot. I like Gerard's character, all the darkness that surrounds him and his 'inner demon' that consumed him during Rachel's case, because it reminded him of his past with Lizzie. I also liked Frankie's character, and how he seemed the opposite of Gerard - Alive, happy, more colorful...
Since the beginning of the story that I had been wondering what was the thing that Gerard had done as a teen, and it surprized me when I read the letter he wrote to Frankie.
Overall, I think your writing style is amazing. I love your descriptions, how descriptive you made each scene (my favorites being that breakdown Gerard had in the bathroom and his dream) and just the whole concept. I think you did a really great job, and I'm planning on reading the rest of the chapters soon :)
Keep up the good work :D

Excuse me while I break down into tears.

*breaks down*

Okay, now that it's ten minutes later, I just have to say that this was amazing, a wonderful ride, and I loved it. I love the final two chapters, and how everything wasn't all happy-perfect-land throughout the entire story. And the A/N on the Epilogue was just wonderful, and I have to say that in Chapter 13, the whole J.K. Rowling/Harry Potter/Alan Rickman thing had me rolling, because it was the light in the darkness of Bob's super sad, had-me-feeling-for-him story. I loved it.

I can't get over the fact that this is the end. But I shall. And then I shall search through the rest of your stories, because I lovelovelove your writing. Congratulations. :)

-from comment swap.
I never read slash, but after this I just might. This is so lovely and intense and you really know your characters – aside from obvious public personas you have to build on, there’s a depth in the way they move and interact and I think this is a brilliant story. I think maybe you rely too heavily on bold and italics rather than writing talent to help you make your point. I wish you luck with it.

First off let me say that I don't usually read slash stories but this one is very good. I was brought to this by comment swap and i'm glad it did! I love the way your story is written. It's so intense and raw; i love it!
I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter between Frank and Gerard. Keep up the great work!!!

First off-I love the song in the A/N. And the Cascada version, but I think that's the nine-year-old me coming out to play again.

Second-The memories tore me up, because they're just so sad when you think of what ends up happening in the future, and how it ends up affecting Frank. And then the end, with Ray and Frank going in a sort-of back-and-forth way, though it's not much of an argument. I just can't get over the awesomeness you have placed in a story. I can't.

I AM READING IT. I AM LOVING IT. I AM CRYING THROUGH IT. You know I'm a major weeper, why did you have to write such a strong, sad story? <3 I hate so much about Gerard's character - you know that kind of hatred that you love ;) - but he IS a very good character. And okay, although it's kind of obvious what he did to Lizzie and who Lizzie is, I think you have a great potential going on here. And of course, your writing is STUNNING! Keep up the good work, hun! ;D

Whoa, totally unexpected, but so...totally...lovely. I can't even, I just can't...Ah. I have no other words. I just can't express it.

P.S.: Gerard's perfect grammar. YES. XD

i don't know why but comment swap as sent me here again, this is actually such a good thing becuase now i can read it again! i haven't read a MCR story in ages, so yeah, really think the second time you read this it becomes 8 times better, yet again it's an amazing story, and you have amazing grammer and spellings. i also love how you've recommend the soundtrack it's a cool feature! xx

Hellllo, I've come here via comment swap.
First off, I was really excited since I haven't read a good MCR story in quite awhile. Your fic didn't disappoint either. Your plot is quite original, and the dark theme of it is what drew me in. That letter...oh god.
You're doing a really great job with everything. Keep it up.

-Jess xx

I was recommended this story through comment swap, and still feel rather uncomfortable with the suicide/rape/death themes but I will try my best.

Overall, your writing is very sophisticated and loyal to the characters' emotions you are writing about. I love the line, "she had just looked at me, pale-faced, tears in her eyes and said...", that is very effective in description - I can almost see her face and the tears rapidly drying into her skin.

In chapter 10, you open with "Frank didn't have much appetite recently," I just think that you should have written, "Frank didn't have much of an appetite recently,".

I love how you recommend the soundtrack, it really sets the atmosphere and lets me into the mind of you, the writer.

Daaahh...Ah. That letter. Th-that letter, oh my God. Daaah. DAAAAH. I can't even, I just...Aw. And that's just ridiculous. And when the chapter ended, I felt as though I needed more, because this is driving me insane. And you know what actually gave me a smile throughout this chapter? Gerard knows some damn good words, and has hella good grammar. Can the people I go to school with be like him? XD

But seriously, that's just so...I have no words. But I love it. So much.

First I'd like to say I adore your layout, it's really nice, i'm glad comment swap reccomed me to this because i wouldn't have read it other wise, the summary was really good, the summary got me hooked straight away so well done, you've created something differen't and you should be really proud of that, the grammer and spelling is really good and everything runs perfectly!

I'd first like to begin this by saying I was quite drawn to this by it's title. It is very catchy.
The plot to this is incredibly different, and I love it! You've created a whole different atmosphere!
Everything about this is just... Perfect. The layout is easy to read and simple, the description is amazing, the characters are brilliant, and everything runs together smoothly.

Well done c:

A rare win for comment swap.

When comment swap tossed your story my way and I read the summary, I was expecting a run-of-the-mill MCR story. But as soon as I started reading the first chapter, I was proven wrong. Simply put, I was floored. Your writing style is envious. Your descriptions are absolutely amazing. I felt like I was actually in the story, which is something I can't see for most pieces on this website.

I do believe my favorite scene is the one where Frank walked in to find Gerard's body. I like how it wasn't just 'he's dead on the couch. oh no.' There was more to it, it seemed natural, like it was something that could actually happen.

Sorry if my comment is getting long, but I'm sure you don't mind. This is an amazing story - definitely among the top on Mibba in my mind now - and I'm definitely subscribed

You have a very interesting plot going on. I like (that's probably the wrong word to use...) how we get to see into Gerard's life, but then he actually goes through with the suicide and then we see the aftermath. I've never read a story like this before, it's very good (:

Aww. D: The people Ray's working with are all a bunch of arses. Yeah. Like, seriously, how dare they talk about him and be happy about Gerard's death? "Lucifer" or not, that's cold. Like, seriously?

And then the note. Oh, the note, the note.

But, of course, I love the little ending part of Gerard's moment. Hah-hah, "the UST between you guys is disgusting." That would've made me miss that guy even more. Aww, poor everybody. Gosh, I love this.

Oh my Lord. Bob's POV was funny-because of the way he sort-of reacted towards the doctor-and Ray's was just...putting you bastards in your place. Yeah, whoever Agent Black is should get shot up real quick, because we can all see that's he tryna go. That ain't gonna fly.

I feel so bad for Frank. He's just having the worst time over here with nightmares and cutting and just...oh. Make it stop. (But carry on, for this is wonderful. :3)

Holy me oh my.

That's....MYEAH-HAH! That's horrible! Well, you know, good horrible. But horrible! Aww! And then the sixth chapter was just...Ah, it made me wanna cry. That's insanity, to just walk in and see your lover that way, my heart is breaking for Frank, and Ray, too, 'cuz Gerard's his friend and that's just....Oh, that's horrible.

And now I'm suspicious, because in the A/N of chapter 5, you say his part is not yet over.

Give me more. NOW. (Or, y'know, when you can, don't wanna rush you. :3)