It Is Only You - Comments

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The nostalgia that hits me just from reading the summary is hilarious. What a great song to base this off for an old contest I'm assuming? Other first impressions; I'm not a fan of the content background you have going on. I think it would look much better with just a plain white slate for the text area. It's a little heavy on my eyes.

Right off the bat I really love your writing style. It sounds personal and conversational. It isn't too flowery, over the top, nor is it boring. "From the basics of love, to the nooks and crannies" is SUCH a good line.
By the second paragraph I'm grappling at my chest. This is a painful read for anybody who can relate to it, jeez.
"It was here, at this exact indication of your behavior, which I should of drawn the line, or at least question your motives." WHY ARE YOU DIRECTLY SPEAKING TO ME WITH THIS. I'm completely biased by now, as this is just something that connects to me on a personal level. The fact that it is written well only adds to that.

Oh, man. What a trip. By the end of it, I'm sad for the narrator. I've been the narrator. So, as someone who's lived literally this exact situation, kudos to your portrayal of it. This is extremely realistic and the emotions are captured well.

This is really beautiful. I love all your descriptions and word choices.

This has a very good flow to it and is written very well, it reads fluidly like poetry. The words you use are different from what people would use, and sometimes they don't seem to fit quite right (like "from the commence") but majority of the time the words sound like they have been carefully decided. The layout is beautiful and goes very well with the story, it almost feels calming. Great work.

I love that this is so poetic. Everything flows beautifully and your writing is absolutely amazing. There seems to be a spacing error at the paragraphs "It was here..." and "The melodies that once flowed..." You must have just forgotten to enter down. (:

This is beautiful. It's written very poetically and I love that. You have a really fluid voice and great vocabulary. I love the emotion in this. I think it was really great. I'm not always big on stories without dialogue that are totally internal but I really enjoyed this. Great job!