Never by Your Side - Comments

First off, I really enjoyed the interaction between the characters at the end of the first chapter. I thought the meeting between them was adorable. I’m not really a huge fan of high school fics, but I feel like this one has potential.

As far as concrit goes, I did get a little frustrated with the narrator at times, and I found him to be a little too wordy and articulate for a high school kid, so that irritated me a little. I also have to admit that the opening of the story was a little cliché, and because, along with the summary, the first chapter is the reader’s first impression of a story, I would suggest that it’s something worth going back and working on. The opening just didn’t really catch my attention as a reader. I also noticed a few grammatical errors, but a beta could definitely help you out with that.

Overall, I enjoyed reading this story, and I wish you luck as you continue to work on it :)

My intense love for this story!
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This is amazing! More soon? :D

HEEEEEEEEEEEY IT'S YOUUUU! I love you, this is amazing, continue it? <3

This is amazing already! I NEED more of this :')
It's really great :)
I'm intrigued to see where it's going to go...