Sail - Comments

Hi, got this from comment swap :) I just have one tiny itty bitty little critique: the sentence "I blame it on my ADD baby" needs a comma between 'ADD' and 'baby'. Maybe it's just me but I totally thought people were blaming things on a baby with ADD like yikes took me a second to realize this was going to be a romance. XD

ANYWAY, I love the layout, definitely fits the theme of the story and how the characters interact with their families. Beautiful way to read. I'm not much of a romance reader but the way they both ended up at the park and it seemed meant to be totally brought me back to the way I met my own fiance and how we kept on running into each other. The plot is growing at a great pace and your descriptions of how the fights go down are vivid and draw the reader in like a ship to the ocean. :) And I just have to say, exquisite grammar! It's petty but it made it so much easier to read with the way the story flowed and didn't hiccup over spelling or awkwardly placed sentences. Great work, exemplifies the way some people just help you out of the storm in a thunderous personal life. :)

-Comment Swap-
So, I really like this.

Chandler and Briella are so believably written, without crossing the line into the Realm of the Cliche. That's a really hard thing to do with characters like them, and you do it so beautifully. If I really like a story, I don't finish reading it until it's complete, but I'm bookmarking this one. I eagerly await more. Beautifully done. B)

So I read through the first few chapters, then I kept going until I hit the end of it. :D I really love your story so far! I like how the two characters came to meet and are slowly becoming more familiar with each other. And Chandler's family is so colorful, I love it.

Keep writing! I can't wait to see where you go with this and see Briella and Chandler interact more. They seem like fun. :3

I really like this story!
First of all, the layout really fits with the tone of the story, especially when it's rainy and dreary.
Second, I really like the relationship forming between Chandler and Briella. I like that they've got a bit of a friendship or, at least, an affinity for one another going and they're not just jumping into bed together.
I think the supporting characters are great, too, especially Byron. I can't wait to see where this story ends up!

First of all, I adore your layout, it's amazing. I think it really sets the tone for the story as well; it wasn't a happy-go-lucky layout that contrasted the stories plot.

I really liked how you introduced the characters in the first two chapters. It makes them easy to relate to, and makes everything less confusing in the long run. The only thing I could say is that the name Chandlet reminds me of the TV show Friends and I couldn't take him seriously at first. That's just my problem though, aha.

Ah, you've paced this story so well, it's awesome. I love you the characters aren't totally in love with each other but you've showed the initial attraction, most stories I've read haven't been like that. One thing I will say though is that sometimes your sentences get a little choppy. It's just in a couple places and not incredibly noticeable though.

Anyways, this story is super interesting so far! And Sail is an amazing song, such a good choice for the title/summary :)

P. S. Sail is an absolutely phenomenal song. I love the choice.

You've got a good pace going with this story; they're attracted, but not insanely head over heels for each other like a lot of stories tend to do. You're pacing it well, extremely well.

I'm curious about Chandler's family; they seem like a chaotic hot mess, but they're so very interesting, I honestly couldn't stop reading during the family dinner, the entire scene was absolutely brilliantly played out. I can't wait to see what develops with them. Best of luck with this!

I liked that you had two character introductions in the chapters. And the fact that the romance doesn't start immediately- Briella's playing hard to get.

Also, the whole breakdown of both of their families, and connecting them through natural disasters, was really well written.

The layout is cool, the greyness and fog play into the weather references and how they first met.

Ok. First, I'm in love with your layout. The photo gives it kind of an emotional haunted feeling. I don't know, maybe it is just me. The border is very nice and I love the leaf you have next to the character names each chapter for their point of view. It did kind of irk me that the first 2 or 3 chapters were so short, but I suppose those were just introduction chapters anyways. Nice job! Keep up the good work!

Kristen :)

Woah, what an amazing set up. It's written like a book and told VERY well. I found myself hooked upon the first two chapters given the introduction of the story. I certainly look forward to reading more :)

I really like the style of writing