Sunshine and Cadavers - Comments

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You have an interesting writing style.. I've only just read the first chapter and I like what I've seen so far.. The sentences flow together well and the use of dialogue really helps us get to know the characters in a personal level.. The MC's reaction to her mother's death is an interesting one, it's like she's numb from shock and doesn't really think of it. I think this is quite realistic and well-described.. Well done :) Can't wait to read on and see what else happens.

Comment swap brought me here. I just want to say that I like the story plot. It seems pretty cool so far, and the title really caught my attention. You have good talent for writing. I really like the way the sentences flow nicely. The layout is nice, and the story content is excellent. Great job.

Well first off, you have a very good writing style. The layout is perfect and not clumped together. I really can't find any grammar or punctuation errors. I'm interested to see where this story goes. The only real criticism I have to say is that there isn't much going on right now in the story, so it was getting a bit boring for me. But the very last chapter with Brian started to interest me. Just maybe, spice them up a bit? But that's your decision. Other then that you have a lot of talent, and you should definitely continue writing.

Who doesn't like some sunshine and dead bodies?
I do, for sure. C: Comment Swap brought me here. The title is what urged me to read this, and I like the layout, too. Just one criticism about it, the chapter links are a little bright, how about a darker blue? Now, onto the story, I liked it a lot, and the plot too. You should keep writing, you have some talent.

I love the irony of the title.

:) The summary sounds really awesome, but it's hard to read while the picture in the background is blending in with the text. Perhaps you can go back and tweak the layout a bit? :D Otherwise, this story sounds really cool.

Ah!!! I love it! It was pure perfection! Update! Update!