Wow, you're an amazing writer. I love you're description it's perfect. Not to much that it's overdone but enough that you can really see the story unfold. I love the story the plot is really something. I can't wait to read more. I have nothing to pick at the story it's great. You're spelling was great i didn't pick up any mistakes either because the story was to interesting or because there wern't any i don't know. I also didn't pick up any grammer mistakes either again the story was so good that i didn't notice or because there weren't any.
One thing i'd like to ask is 'Why let the readers know she was in a car accident and in a coma why don't keep us guessing?