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March 13th, 2011 at 02:20am
I fixed 'em both. :arms:
- the endless.:
- She thought, her eyes narrowing with the evil smile on her face.
I don't know, the description of the smile as evil just didn't seem to fit with the serenity of the scene. I don't even really get why she would smile evilly for something like that. Maybe like, contentedly, or something. It didn't really match the atmosphere of the whole chapter for me.
And: A subtle moonlight kissed her skin
I dunno if you meant a subtle stream of moonlight kissed her skin, or what, or if it was intentional and I'm just missing something. But yeah, you didn't get pissed at me last time for grammar corrections, so I'll try my luck again here. :cute: