A Note From A Dead Man. - Comments

Brought here by comment swap. You had me hooked from the very beginning of the story with Daniel making it explicitly clear that he isn't at all a good guy. I read it all the way through, and he wasn't kidding! While he might not be the most evil of characters, he's definitely an anti-hero at best, especially with his motives for turning Maple into a vampire. That was probably his personal flavor of mercy when he could've simply killed her with the other boys. That was a tense cliffhanger you left on with the antagonist reveal at the end, and I hope you write more chapters of this! Excellent story!

This is amazing! Ever since the beginning I've been captivated with such interest, that it took a long time for me to recover each cliff-hanger. Your ability to string words together is flawless and I really do hope to write like you one day. I really enjoy reading your stories and eventually hope to read more! Good job!

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Oh wow. From the title, to the summary, to the first sentence, you had my complete attention. The writing style is wonderful. You've created here something amazing. I've subscribed and I can't wait to read more! Best of luck!

I really liked this, the writing style is great.
The attitude of the narrators makes the story very interesting to read. the landscape you have painted is elegant and dark with beautiful structure to it. this story will haunt the minds of the readers for a great amount of time.

This. Is. Awesome. I absolutely love this, and I'm only on chapter one. There is no doubt that I will subscribe to this! I really like where you're going with this. My only thing is that perhaps you could space out your lines a touch more, I'm not really sure, but something about it makes it a touch difficult to read. The story itself is fantastic, I adore your flow and your writing style as well. Kudos to you, I love this!

Cool.

Oh wow I really like this1 The writing style is just so awesome! (I actually turned around when it said don't turn around, because I'm stupid ha-ha). I haven't read past the first chapter but I really will finish this story! Only one problem and this might just be me, but I had to highlight the words because they were white against a white background. You should change that before you get reported. I like the narrators attitude too and I'm curious to find out who's reading the story. The world that you have created is creepy and elegant at the same time. Therefore making it interesting. I shall keep reading now!

I like how this story is written style wise. Like a letter from some jerk, but it's ust so interesting you have to keep reading. I like it a lot.

The only thing I would change is your background picture, because it makes the story hard to read, and since the text lays over it, the picture seems unneeded.

This is amazing. I disagree with the commenter who said the use of periods were unnecessary in the summary. I think the use of periods was important in setting the overall mood of the story. I love how it is written in such a way that you feel as if the character is speaking directly to you. I adore this story. Great job! :)

This right here is one of the most amazing things I have ever read. I was hoping to make that sound a bit more eloquent, but I can't. That was absolutely incredible. Your writing style is absolutely incredible, and I can't pull myself away from this piece.

The world you have created is beautifully thought out, and actually haunting to an extent. You are an amazing writer, and I can't wait to read more of your work.

In the summary, I didn't like how many sentence fragments there were. Maybe I'm just being picky, but I would have liked to have seen some commas instead of so many unnecessary periods.

I haven't really read many stories that inform the reader they are reading a story, even when the story is told in first person, so that was something unique to this one. It made your story stand out and it is a unique way of writing. Again, there were a lot of sentence fragments, but I'm just being picky.

As for your plot, I thought it was really good. You have a unique concept and character. I like that you modernized the story with the use of Twitter. It was very funny and catchy.

I’ve never read anything like this before – the way that you’ve crafted it from the first chapter is so interesting and interactive. It engages the reader and even made me wonder about the things I see out of the corners of my eyes. XD Already I’m wondering what’s gonna happen and how things are gonna turn out, and the suspense that you’ve created simply by explaining the backstory is incredible.

In the second chapter, the plot thickens and it’s really getting even more interesting, if that’s even possible. The narrator is getting more fleshed out by the sentence and I’m already starting to empathize with them, even though I’m a human and I kinda don’t want him to kill me. Now I’m super interested to see where this is going. xD

In the third chapter, your descriptions are amazing, good lord! I could see it all happening in my head and knowing the backstory of it all and the narrator made it all the more gripping. I can’t wait to read more of this especially since what happened to Maple. I have a great feeling that there’s gonna be even more action and suspense in this story and it’ll only get better. 

i really like how this is addressed to like, the human race. it's really good, lots of rhetoric that works really well, and i love the use of different mediums like numerical lists to get across information.

it has a kind of watchmen/v for vendetta feel about it, i really really like it.

I really like how there isn't a hero. It's refreshing and real. I like how you did the vampire thing too. When I found out that he was one at first I thought that vampires were a bit 'been there, done that' but it's different then any vampire thing I've ever read before. It isn't boring or predictable like those stories can get sometimes. This must have taken a lot of forethought. I'm impressed.

I've only read the first chapter so far, but this is very good and decently written (I did notice just a few grammatical errors or places where sentence structure didn't flow as smoothly as it could), and I will most likely continue reading it. I really like the mix of fantasy characters and a dystopian society that's in trouble. If you've got a lot of this planned out and you really know where you're going with it, I think it could make a good novel in its genre.

" I have never been, nor will I ever be, the “good guy”." New I was going to love it straight. I love me an anti-hero. I was right too. It was superb and though I only read one chapter, I still love it. I read your blog and I think it's sad that you question your talent when you've written something like this. Personal, direct and witty - it's everything great about fiction.

Oh god.

I'm super tired, so I've only read the summary/first chapter, but.

FREAKING CHILLS.

''This is a note from a dead mans hands.''

Your summary is amazing: why did you say it was bad in your blog? I must admit when I read the mini summary underneath the title, I was a bit iffy. The idea of vampires and werewolves and shapeshifters all bundled together did not appeal. But then I decided I wasn't going to be a fic snob, and I was going to click on it. I am so glad I did. This book must be published. If it does, please just tell me where to buy it.
I will pay many pennies, yes?

''The one where you think someone’s there watching you but when you turn there is no-one there? See it? Well there is someone there and they know that you know. No. Don’t turn around and look again. It’ll make them suspicious and more likely to kill you. If you turned around just then I could suggest you stop reading now. You wont live to the end of the week if they’ve managed to read any of this.''

Your writing is just so perfect and I love you. This part ^ gave me chills, because it is the creepiest thing I have heard in a while. Your style of writing is so to the point and commanding, yet the points you are making seem so ethereal. It reveals so much about the character. I'm proud to say I didn't look behind my shoulder :)

I adore the idea of 'their' world and ours intertwining, and them secretly watching over us while we do our daily duties is just so scary. Especially when you said (I can't find the exact quote) 'Look! Did you see the shadow move?'' or something similiar to that phrase: My hair stood up from the back of my neck. That's how fantastic this concept is.

After all, this is my suicide note.

He's explaining about the other world through his suicide note? You brilliant genius, you.

Like the two below, I think that it is kickass.

My only critiscism would be to space out your paragraphs. The giant blocks of text seem a bit daunting, and it hurt my eyes to read and follow each line without wandering off into another one.



But that's it. Just the spacing of the paragraphs.

I will read the other chapters tomorrow.

This must be published.

Hello, I'm MiraEatYourHeartOut's cousin, and she told me about your story. I have to agree with her, this is a really kickass story. You've done an amazing job so far. I can't wait to read the rest of it. :)

This, I must say, is kick ass. Good work!

Hahah good. It'll be up when I can decide what to do properly. Please keep reading. :)