Plain Jane - Comments

Love the idea of plain Jane and average Joe. Overall the story is very cute and I'm a HUGE Taylor Swift fan so appreciate that as well. I think with a little more specific detail and some more direction this could be really great!

As a one-shot I thought this was really adorable. I loved all of the typical teenage dilemmas of wanting to fit in, and wanting to be accepted. I also think this story has the potential to have multiple chapters and become more in depth with the dialog and the relationship between Jane and Joe, and then Jane and Peter. Over all it was really nice though. Good job. :)

Loved the idea; cute idea with the plain jane and average joe! I definitely suggest a layout for this story, you'll definitely get more readers/comments that way. Anyways, I loved the idea. Some parts were a little strung out or rushed, but other than that it was a nice, short read.

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So first I'm not sure rather this is a one-shot or a chapter story, if it's a chapter story I think the events could have been stretched out, but if it's a one-shot then you wrote it absolutely perfectly. I'm usually more into fantasy but I enjoyed this story, I wasn't sure if their names were actually Jane, Joe and Peter or if they were aliases like the names on zombie land but I liked them.

I kind of just knew Peter was no good, she just seemed way too into him and he just seemed way too perfect do I was waiting for done sort of reality to hit and once I heard about the exams I knew where things were going. I knew that Joe was talking about her, but I like how cool he was about her liking Peter and the way he finally told her he liked her was just awesome.

The only thing this story was missing in my opinion was a layout, though the default did work well for it and Jane and Joe shoving their new found happiness in Peter's face to show him that he missed out and really just wasn't that important....Justice!

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I feel there's a bit of a lack of description and I'm not a huge fan of the intro, it's meant to hook people and I didn't feel very roped into reading it. I like the idea though, it's really good.

I think everybody feels like Plain Jane every once in a while, as if they are blending in to the background. I've left school now so while reading this it brought back a trunk-load of half-baked memories concerning my exams, for which I thank you. =)
I kind of liked the use of "Plain Jane," and "Average Jo," even though it does come off as a bit conventional, and the story was rather obvious ... but I honestly think that that is part of its charm. I agree with the before comments in that it reminds me of a cute teenage movie or a mini fairy-tale above everything else.
But overall, I actually enjoyed the read. Good job =)

This is seriously so cute. Peter's an asshole. I'm glad he failed everything. He deserves worse and Joe is such a sweetheart! I want a Joe. I kind of felt bad for Jane but then I was like Joe makes all these hints and you see these hints and yet you dont date. WHY. But I was really happy with the ending. I loved how this was a cute little fairytale and even though she lost a man, she still got the man and that's all that matters.

Well, it's a cute teenage story. It is kind of like a Saturday afternoon movie, one can enjoy it but it is not too deep, it's well, a cute teenage story. Although I have to note the lack of mistakes is remarkable, moat stories I see here have so many errors in them, errors that would only be excusable if the story was written by a child. Yours is well written, but like the previous comment says, the stereotyping doesn't do this story a favor, on the contrary, it makes it look sort of childish. No offense intended in any possible way, kay?

I like this story, the idea and all, but I'm honestly not too into your writing style. The use of the adjectives and throwing characters into stereotypes was amusing, but I feel like the story could have been better without it.

I quite enjoyed this- althought the protagonist is the kind of character I hate ( I get that this is relevant to the story though) and I like the use of 'plain jane' and 'average joe' brings a sense of humour to it.
I liked that the ending wasnt expected, although I thought it was obvious of Joes feelings earlier on.
Overall I quite enjoyed it, as you've said parts did feel rushed and I get that it had to happen to cover the amount of time so it isnt a negative ++ I like your style of writing- the hints into her thoughts + how cliche people can be :)
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This was pretty good! I could see how you I guess, were inspired by Taylor Swift's songs even though I was only familiar with one of them!
So, I have a few suggestions :P Now this one you don't have to take seriously! I think it would flow better if Peter's name was just Pete since Jane and Joe are one syllable names.
Another one you had a sentece that said something like "He wasn't good with chemistry, and somehow it came naturally to me." I can't remember how you worded it, but I think you should consider revising it a little since I kind stumbled on it while I read. Plus I didn't expect it to end that way! It surprised me which I liked! I thought it would be cliche like "You Belong With Me" where she would get with Pete and stay together but they didin't!
Other than that I really like it, I wish you all the best with the contest! Hope this comment it hopeful to you!

This is really good. Yes some parts did seem a little rushed otherwise it was geart.