October 8th, 2013 at 01:12am
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Your summary is definitely intriguing! There are a few grammar issues (your/you're), but nothing huge. One thing I am curious about is Drake's true feelings and whether or not he's a trustworthy narrator or if he's lying when he says he doesn't love the sorceress? If he is lying, you might want to try to make that conflict more obvious. This seems like a very interesting take on the Beauty and the Beast!
I just found your story and I'm loving it! Super good start and really good cliff-hanger. Please update soon, since I look forward to reading more!