June 5th, 2019 at 02:37am
Comment swap c:
Right off the bat I personally have to say I am not a big fan of switching POVs throughout stories :( If you wrote from an omniscient narrators point of view, you wouldn't have to switch POVs each chapter. But like I said, that's just a personal preference of mine. I think a layout would help attract more readers to this as well.
Anyways, as someone who did not read the prequel, you really caught my attention by the last paragraph of the first chapter. I would recommend you maybe summarize what happened in the prequel in the summary of this story though, and not just say it's the sequel. It would help me as a reader to become more invested in what's happening if I knew some background information about what happened prior to the events of this sequel.
However I do really enjoy the dynamics between the characters so far. They seem to really, genuinely care for each other. Your description with feelings is also pretty contagious. If anything I'm definitely invested in the characters and their interactions with each other.
I'm in agreement with the others who commented saying it is a little hard to follow, though. It seems like it isn't linear, which is totally okay, and I'm sure if continued the pieces would fall into place eventually. Not everything is supposed to be understood at first.
For starters, I do really enjoy this. Your description of their environments, surroundings, characteristics, and feelings are amazing. I am completely drawn in to the dynamics of the characters. I do agree with the others in that it would make more sense if a summary of the first book was included. Overall it is really good and I hope to see more from you soon!