Anastasia - Comments

I think it's very interesting to read about, this family. I also find it really neat that you're not writing a romance story, which is pretty much what this site consists of. One suggestion though, I do think that the first chapter jumped into the action too fast, and when it did, it seemed...calm. For a shooting scene, it was extremely calm and weird for me to read. Maybe you're one of those people who don't put a lot of detail into your writing, I don't know, but it all happened very fast and there was no emotion that I could sense, really. I didn't....I wasn't really invested into it.

You have a great story, don't get me wrong. I just feel there needs to be more description, more detail, before big events, is all. And maybe you want to keep it this way, that's fine.

I really like the fact that you are basing this writing on historical information. It makes it very realistic and gives the reader a background without having to delve too much into it in the story in order to understand it.

The first person narration is not my favorite type of narration, but it could work perfectly with a historical fiction story, setting it up to be in the point of view of the main character.

The dialogue flowed nicely and I really am curious now to learn more about the assassination of the Romanov family, which I will always consider a plus in a story: if a story gets you to want to learn or do something new, then it's a story with great potential.

Also, setting up the immediate execution of the family in the first chapter can work perfectly in order to develop the character, given the really troubled thing he has just witnessed with his family.

Pertaining to the layout, it's lovely, easy to the eyes, and header image fits nicely with it; though something more relating to the years in which this historical fact happened would be more suiting.

Outside from that I saw no grammatical errors to be corrected and the flow between dialogue and narration is nice.

I love it
Can't wait for more