Deterioration - Comments

I'm here to deliver the first part of your Halloween treat!

I like the layout, personally. The picture actually creeps me out bit, I've never been a big fan of hospitals, but it does its job well.

I'm a massive fan of anything to do with zombie stories, but you've added your own innovative spin onto this one, which I absolutely love. The little details and descriptions that you use emphasise your writing, and as has been mentioned before, for a one-shot, you've developed the characters really well. The ending was my favourite part, though. I love how, rather than leave it with Jeremy and Constance dying, you bring it back to what I assume is the next day, where the cycle begins again. It's a really strange concept, but I think it's fabulous. Well done!

This definetly wasn't the typical zombie story! I also love the mysteriousness of the story.

Background
It's a bit on the simple side for such a complex story, but I like it. It's just bit bland.

Story
You pull me away with this. I loved the originality of it, like I've never read anything like it. The details used are absolutely wonderful and really play directly into the story. I like the way you execute a memory, it just flows with the story. I really loved the way you developed your characters. Again, it was just a wonderful piece.

the subject of zombies isn't really one of my favourites but you made me interested in it. You write very good and I always like a good written story. Also the story, as in the plot, is really well created. You used some usual subjects but you also added something else. It's like making from nothing, something. You gave reasons for everything you wrote there and I admire that. It's really well made. :) When it comes to Apocalypse everyone has their own idea but yours is like...taking something people are interested in and making it more dangerous but at the same time, we, as human are the cause. I hope you understand what I'm trying to say here. The whole time I stood and read and I was getting more and more intrigued by what is going to happen. I love how the principle character doesn't know herself what's going on and how you keep us in a continuous labyrinth. We don't know where she goes, what would happen and neither does she. It's a very smart way to keep us on the edge. I also like the repetitive destiny...in the end she finds herself in the exact same place she left in the first place: the hospital. I love the tragic feel of the plot and I'm pretty much a melancholic person so it suits me really well. In my point, it is very psychological made but still awesome. Congratulation. And I say this with my entire respect:D

I completely and utterly love this! The story itself is fascinating! It was just a-m-a-z-i-n-g! The whole time you just sat there wondering what to expect. I love the way you describe things as well. And the layout is beautiful.

Definitely going to check out some of your other pieces of work.

I love this! I was totally captured and curious the whole time.
you kept me guessing and you kept a mystery in the story
the most beautiful part is that the main character herself had no idea. it was all a mystery that she was figuring out, and we got to figure it out with her.
it was a traumatic, new outlook on the apocalypse. one I've never seen before and it's not a typical "oh zombies yeah typical zombies"
its a means of human survival against human species malfunctioning itself.
I love the way you write and I'm definitely going to check and see if you have anything else I want to read!
keep on writing.
the enjoy broke my heart and mended it back together at the same time.
you're amazing!

Love this

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that was fucking amazing!
so cool! i love it that was just awesome!
im in aweeeee i can't believe how good that was :O