In Over My Head - Comments

Hello! I enjoyed this chapter and I think it has a lot of potential if you ever continue it :D

I sort of teared up a bit. I'd like to read more

I like the overall feel of the story. It started out with a whole lot in one chapter, but overall is really good. I do see a few grammatical mistakes, but those are easily fixed. I would like to see where you're going with the story, so I hope to see more soon!

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I'm not sure how I feel about the layout, and that's one of the things that makes me most interested in a story.
As far as the story itself, there are a few grammar and punctuation errors, but those could all be easily fixed. I think you put a bit much into this first chapter alone and that it could be spread out into more chapters it would add to the suspense or mystery? Also, I'm not quite sure what this story is even about yet..