First off, I just want to say that I like the simplicity of the layout and the summary, it drew me in and even though it's a contest entry, I'm glad you put the summary in, giving me a way to be interested in the story.
The story was very intriguing to me. I was hooked from the first words until the end, and the way you incorporated the quote was brilliant. You seemed to switch tenses a bit, but other than that I really enjoyed the emotion of the female lead and the way she could sense his darkness, his edge. Overall, I really liked this. Thanks for entering!
All in all, the story was written well and the quote was in a creative way. However, I'm utterly confused now. A very curious spin you put on the story.
The story was very intriguing to me. I was hooked from the first words until the end, and the way you incorporated the quote was brilliant. You seemed to switch tenses a bit, but other than that I really enjoyed the emotion of the female lead and the way she could sense his darkness, his edge. Overall, I really liked this. Thanks for entering!