Forever Yours - Comments

This is smashing! It's a brilliant story, well written and full of character emotion. I love it so much! You did an amazing job!

Hi! I have to admit this isn't the kind of story I use to read, but your fic is pretty nice. Sad and funny, at the same time. It's sweet. Even if I don't know the characters yor wrote about. I'm cynical but I love happy endings, anyway. Will you update it, sooner or later?

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This is really nice. It makes me pretty sad that you haven't updated in almost a year. You should think about continuing, 'cause I think I speak for multiple people when I say I'd like I see where this goes.

Updating things aside, I really like this. The whole storyline and everything is just very well thought out and just great.

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Poor Leslie. I don't know what it's like to lose a loved one but I can only imagine her pain. I know she feels horrible and doesn't wanna move on..
Anyways, your writing is pretty good. I like this story. The layout matches up perfectly with the story. Good job!

I really like it! give us more :D

poor girl:(

Update!!(:

Joel's a cutie xD
update soon pleeease?

I like this :D It's so sad but it's incredible.

This is really good ^____^ It started off really sad, but I guess that's the unique part of it. The plot is really well made up, which has made me officially subscribed to this story :D It's kind of sad how you only have four chapters though, so that means you have to update soon :D

Anyways, really good. You've added a reader and another subscriber :D

I got excited when I saw I got to read a fic featuring joel AND john, and the more I read, the more pleased I was when I noticed you incorporated a lot of the band. I like the plot a lot (as of right now), and I definitely think I'll continue reading. Other than a few grammar mistakes as well as past/present tense indecisiveness (it SEEMS), this was really interesting and I look forward to more :)

I like the story. It started out sad. I still enjoy it very much though. I don't like reading fan fics much, but I definitely have to subscribe to this one. It really left me wanting more. I'll be happy to read the chapters to come. Also your writing is amazing !!

Aww. Your story is coming off so sad, I did like it though. If I was into band fics I would totally subscribe. I liked it, I think you should keep it up. As the other commenters mentioned you have a few grammar mistakes, not really typos, but some things just don't make sense. Just reread it and go back to it and you should be totally fine. I think it's a great start, don't give up.

Whoa! Plot twist!
Though I'm not a HUGE The Maine fan, I really enjoy this. I'm not a fan of the death so early thing, though it's likely because I don't think I can handle much more depressing things tonight. On the other hand though, you're a skilled writer! :D

First of all, this is heartbreaking. So sad! But like the others below me have pointed out, there are a lot of confusing shifts between tenses. Other than that, it's really interesting. I'm intrigued as to who John is, though. Is he an ex-husband, is the character a widower, or was it just a bad breakup? Good luck!

This is a really good story, a few errors as the person below me has already addressed so there is no point in restating. But other then that it wasn't bad at all. It could always be worse, trust me, I know from experience. Aha. c:

-Greg.

I'm diving into this with no idea of the main characters; who, what and how they are. However, first off, here are a few things I noticed.

It feels as if you're switching tenses quite a bit there - going from past to present and then back again within a paragraph.

"I woke up, ..."
" I roll on the side..."
"...stretched my arms weakly. "

The notion of a grieving widow moving on is not one a lot of writers explore on Mibba. It's great to see a change in that. You seem to have a great romance starting, and I like it.

There are some issues in grammar that might need fixing - perhaps a beta? Other than that though, good job on this.

First I want to say that the beginning sentence doesn't need a comma. Second I'm a bit confused about the milk situation. "a carton of nearly expired milk that's fresh from the refrigerator." How is it nearly expired but fresh from the refrigerator? Also when you have dialogue and it's “Hey Mom.” I say" you need a comma after mom. Other than that this seems really interesting!

intrigued