1984 REFERENCE!!!! hahaha, that made my day! I like it so far. It's a little jumpy and there are some spelling mistakes, but it is looking really interesting so far. Keep it up!
June 13th, 2012 at 09:18am
I found the layout for starters horrible. It's everywhere basically. The way it fits most of the page makes it look less appealing and the colour scheme didn't exactly fit brilliantly.
The paragraphs could be much better, actually putting it into proper paragraphs instead of how they are.
Some spelling mistakes were in there as well, not many just one or two along with grammar.
Other than that I thought it was quite good, I never usually read fan fictions about X-Men and don't know much of the X-Men but it wasn't hard to keep up with who everyone was on my very little knowledge, keep up the good work though :)