I read it and I did like it, but this is not the type of genre I usually read so with honesty I couldn't focus on the story very well. Don't let my comment discourage you though it's really good.
June 30th, 2012 at 07:54pm
I loved your use of metaphors at the very beginning. It invoked a lot of enigma into your story.
"In his right hand was a worn photograph, nearing at least its fourth birthday." - I love this line so much, and I don't even know why. I'll check back for more updates.