Between the Lines - Comments

wow! I really enjoyed this story, despite the layout being a bit difficult. I really like the plot of it, even if it isn't particularly big... it's nice and short :)

This is really cute. I'm not sure if it's meant to be a one-shot, or if you're continuing on with it, but in all honesty I like it as a one-shot :) Short, sweet, and simple. I do wish that maybe you could make a slightly more interesting layout though; this one is a tad bit bland. The story itself, though, is amazing. I wish you the best of luck, even though I'm entered in this contest too. If I don't take first place, I hope this one does, because the plot is adorable.

It was interesting and made me want to read on. I especially liked the beginning as it drew me in.
It had a nice vibe to it that continued through the rest of the page and the characters seemed very believable.
So anyways , it was pretty well written and captured my attention in the first paragraph. :)

Well, I liked this. It was a different read for me, but it was very intriguing. You gave enough back story throughout which kept the reader hooked. Actually, you kept the reader craving more, the reader wants to know more about them, see more Naomi and Jayne.

My only complaint though, I don't like the black background. It's just not the most aesthetically pleasing color to read text on. But all in all, great story. :)

You've got a pretty layout and I really like the name Naomi.
The starting is what I like the most- the way you start with describing both the characters and after that everything changes.
A pretty good short story!

I’m so glad comment swap brought me here, I really do like this story so far. It’s very interesting and the love-triangle thing that’s going on makes the plot worthwhile. Please continue the story, I would like to see more of it! :)

Okay, first off: The layout is hard to read and the picture is distracting. It's beautiful, I'll give you that, but perhaps you should find another place to put it?

Secondly, the story is amazing! I loved every word of it!