Hope For Moving On - Comments

Okay, this usually is not my kind of story scene. I'm not usually one to read sports fan fics with original characters in the mix. But, let me tell you. You have got some talent under your sleeve. You took a touchy subject, which is clinical depression, and child loss, and you literally had the writing ability to make me want to read more. Seriously, the plot is great. It's sad, it's emotional, but it's interesting with enough of a apprehension build up to it to keep me reading. Great job. By the way, I feel a triangle forming in the plot, not going to completely expect it, because honestly I'm excited for the next update.

I don't much like the background color as much as I do the title image. But, I think the title cover sums up a lot of this story's whimsical meanings, so good job. Slight grammar errors here and there, but who doesn't get that? So I'm not going to bust on you for it. I'm just going leave on a note of, really, really good job. the chapters are worth the wait.

"He styled his hair different today, I don't know why I noticed, but I did."

Should I be concerned about this in the future? I most likely will be anyway. I'm paranoid for David, now...
She also seems awful numb to me, about the baby thing. I think she's heading for a breakdown, but David will be there...right?

I like the layout you have for this. I can see why some people may not like it, but I think it's nice. Simple. Not blinding or too fancy.

I read the first two prequels of this and they were great. I can tell you have a the story all planned out (I hope). The only real errors I saw are that you used "than" some times when it should have been "then". It's just minor errors. The layout on this story is just too simple that it doesn't bring many attention, I guess. Although I do really like this story, it has an interesting plot and I wish you e best of luck! Update soon so I know how you have improved! (:

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Of course, I have no idea what is going on because I don't have time to go back and look through you're prequels, but I will say this, you have a magnificent way of writing and I don't think I've seen any grammers or mistakes so yay for you! The layout isn't my favorite. I don't like the blue contrasting against the blue >.< but that's just me, aside that keep up the good work hon!

First I got to say I love you layout, sweet and simple.

Now with your story,
I've quite enjoyed this, basically because it doesn't seem like a fanfiction. I love how you wrote this, I haven't read much sport themes fics quite like this. Plus I haven't found any spelling or grammar mistakes.

Keep up the good work

Got this through comment swap and I only read the first chapter. So at first, I didn't know what was going on but I'm glad what had happened was brought up (I haven't read the prequels, of course). I like your writing style, though I don't get that feeling of complete and utter depression that losing three babies can have on a woman was conveyed really well. Maybe the looking at blogs and such is an outlet to distract her from her pain... I don't know. I like that David is supportive of her though, and wants her to be happy and herself again. Anyways, good luck with this story!

I hope there is not some cheating in her future with the doctor! Yikes, lol! Great update.

Liked the new update. Glad she seems to be getting better

Comment swap brought me here, and to be quite honest I'm not really fond of any sports so I don't read any sports fanfiction, but this is wonderful. I like your writing style, it's descriptive enough for me to perfectly visualize the scenery. It's amazing, I hope you update soon.

Oh my goodness gracious. My heart was elated that they were together, bursting when she found out she was pregnant, I about passed out when it was triplets and then I was crushed with the miscarriage. And then crushed some more when I read about Harper's depression. I'm so glad that comment swap got me here. It took me awhile to get through all of the stories (with working ungodly crazy hours, trying to see my family, barely seeing my friends and attempting to sleep the few precious hours I DO get every night) but I'm so so glad that I did. I'm subscribing and can't wait for more.

Comment swap got me here but I'm on my way to check out the prequels so I'll be back! LOL

I read the first two prequels of this and they were great. I can tell you have a true writers voice. The only real errors I saw are that you used "than" some times when it should have been "then". It's just minor errors. The layout on this story is just a bit hard to read. Maybe you could choose a darker color for the text. I do really like this story though, it has an interesting plot and if it's written good, I'll read it.

That was really cool. comment swap got me here :) i think you can thank that cause i would've never found this. or read it for that matter haha. Awesome none the less! hope to see more soon. :D
(APPERENTLY NOT ENOUGH CHARACTERS FOR YA COMMENT SWAP?!?!?!? :P)

That was really cool. comment swap got me here :) i think you can thank that cause i would've never found this. or read it for that matter haha. Awesome none the less! hope to see more soon. :D

Wow. I love this! I'm not familiar with hockey, but I don't think I'll really need to be. Although I'd like to know what these people look like. But that's not a big deal. The summary had me intrigued immediately, because I just had to know what it meant! The layout is nice, the summary is amazing, and what I've read is lovely. Great job.

Oh my. Comment swap sent me to the sequel of the sequel, but I've never read the first two pieces. I'm going to go read the first two stories, and then I'll leave you a better comment on this one. Sorry! The story looks really good, the layout is nice and all, but I'm afraid I won't have any idea what is going on if I try to start reading at this point in the series.

Read the first two stories. They were great. Glad you started a new. I look forward to reading it. Great start!

i think this is interesting, i can't wait to see where it goes from here