July 28th, 2012 at 06:50am
A Little Bit Country, a Little Bit Rock and Roll - Comments
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I love your story! Update it again soon, it's so goodJune 30th, 2012 at 07:23pm
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Thanks! I was using my own experience with the, ah, subject. I can understand why men like oral, but I don't really get what the benefit for the average woman is. I figured Skylar might in feel the same way.June 13th, 2012 at 01:25pm
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Oh. Oh my God. Oh my God, what is this?
This awesomeness?
We all know they belonged together, no matter how much I desired that boy for myself. XD I am hopeless. But hey, this is a cute story and a cute couple, and I really like it, and I laughed when Skylar didn't handle the "explosion in her mouth" as well as an experienced person. XD Keep it up!June 12th, 2012 at 11:23pm -
Thanks! Gotta love fan fiction, eh?June 10th, 2012 at 10:30pm
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I am glad I am not the only one who thought those two should be together.
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This is really cute so far.June 10th, 2012 at 10:11pm
So, the chapters are a little short and mostly dialogue and they lack flow. I think this story would be rad if it were a little more fluent.
So I have no idea who this Colten dude is. There was a totally awesome opportunity to introduce me and make me swoon over this mystery man, but I'm at loss. I know his name and his speech patterns at that is it.
Give your readers a real person. Someone with charisma or awkward charm or something. I wanna feel like I'm with John Doe. Not reading him. Having said that, I can see this going somewhere and I'll read up on the rest of this.