Can't wait for more! (:
September 20th, 2012 at 04:09am
Chapter One:
I like how she doesn’t refer to them as her friends, but her ‘friends’ like they don’t actually care about her. The way you start this chapter/story out with such mystery about never specifying what they did and why the looked bad is pretty awesome. Harry had always been the naughty one. That’s so hilarious to me. I love that line because I can totally see him being the naughty one.
Chapter Two:
One thing I’ll say, is that it was really confusion that the point of view changed without warning. All of a sudden, it’s talking Zayn and his therapist and the lack of communication. It was really confusion to me so maybe as a chapter header where you post it, just say their name or something so the reader knows which character is narrating which chapter.
Chapter Three:
I love how Louis freaks out a little bit about her making out with her boyfriend Joe. I love the brotherly love and stuff and I though it was pretty awesome. Niall and Aria’s dynamic in their friendship is really entertaining, for sure. All the boys, Liam and Niall especially, seem really sensitive and observant to Aria and how she’s changed since dating Joe. I saw that Eleanor and Niall are dating and I just died because I thought it was really funny. Like...hilariously funny. Eleanor is only for Louis, not Nialler :D I love it.
Chapter Four: I’m definitely stupid, alright? I just saw the character headings on the banner and realize that every chapter had them so now I feel like a moron for not noticing them earlier...Anyway, to the chapter! I love how Liam starts off his narrative, adding the fact that he’s Daddy Direction, even though One Direction isn’t together, it seems, and I love it. The fact that Liam is so defensive about his interest in Danielle makes me giggle. “Just a little interested” is totally what they always say :)
