One More Step - Comments

Let me start by saying i have not finished it yet. I am only three chapters in. This definitely is not my normal genre, that being said, I am really liking this one! it hooked me enough in the beginning to want to keep reading. I love how the characters and their actions so far are very believable. I hate reading something and thinking like no one would do that! lol so far im liking it very much! I will post another when i get home and can finish!

First off, if just like to say that while I don't typically seek out slash fics for everyday reading, I absolutely loved this one! It was so sweet and I especially loved following Michael and Keaton in their journey to falling in love. The part that really stuck out to me was how Keaton was there for Michael during his family troubles and struggle with self harm. Keaton's patience and understanding, and his willingness to help him heal was amazing. Excellent work!

as someone who doesn't normally read slash, i have to say that that this was interesting and kept my attention. the thing that really stuck out to me was michael's part in which he is saying he cannot be anything more than what he is. this struck me as particularly moving and i really felt for him as a character. all in all this is a well written piece, your work flows nicely and feels very natural. good job!

When I saw this was 8 chapters, I was like Holy Crap... But it was a pretty good read. I love how you used the prompt.
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My first slash, and I was nervous at first, but wow.... I'm actually hooked. You have a way with writing emotions. I don't care how well a story is written, if it doesn't have heart I don't want it. And the first two chapters I read were lovely. I love keeton and Michael's interactions... From their first meeting to the haunted house. They're so adorable. The only thing that struck me was the fixation on shoes. I feel its vaguely out of place, but other than that I realtime really are this. Subscribing and ill read and comment more after I get home from dinner (my company is glaring at me from across the table).

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Jumping past the known complaints, into what feels new?
"of the floor", would be "Off of the floor"?
funny how you can be so average, you'd odd?
I was confused for a moment, but as it was clearly stated, he's gay, wich's a delighing change of pase.
since it's in narraticve, "cursed" would be the word?
"algebra two this year", is "algebra too this year", not 2(two)
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what's "slash"
I like short chapters. I commonly choose them.
how about you change this 'Author's Note', there already are 8 chapters by now.
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it's an enjoyable story, in general, this far.
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oh, and I like the night sky, not sure of the meaning, or relevance to this story, though. I guess it will come later?

This was amazing! I just finished it and I can really say I am happier now that I have read the whole thing. It was sad but at the same time it pulled me in. I could really feel what the characters were thinking and that is rare for me to be able to do. I think you did a great job with this story. I think you should write more slash pairings, you are good at it.

From the first chapter of this story I can tell it's going to be interesting. Keeton and Michael seem so different, I will be interesting to see how their personalities develop over the course of the story. From what I can tell this was very well written but I didn't spot any mistakes in the first chapter and I was really looking. The only thing is possibly deer-in-headlights could be changed to deer-in-the-headlights' but I'm pretty sure that's just me being picky. I like how you use dialogue in this chapter as well, it sounds natural which often it doesn't in stories on Mibba.

Anyway I really like this and I think when I get more time I'll come back and read the rest.

Oh and by the way there is a character in one of my favorite books named Keaton(Different spelling)! He is my favorite character on here so far.

Oh and by the way there is a character in one of my favorite books named Keaton(Different spelling)! He is my favorite character on here so far.

The first chapter was amazing! Sadly that is as far as I have gotten so far. I will have to come back and finish this at a later time. I will subscribe and recommend this so I don't loose it.

I loved this story! I'm so glad it ended the way it did.

man, for a second i thought it was going to be a sad ending...
but it wasnt and i'm so happy! :) I loved this story so much!

It's like Self-Conclusion.
I knew he was going to go suicidal. I didn't know about the cliff but I knew he'd be suicidal. Told you! :p
I liked this and last chapter.
I'm not a very good commenter right now =\
But I can say a big ole THANK YOU for the shout out! Warmed my little heart :,)
Can't wait for our story :D

Well, I'm not a fan of slash (nothing against gays, just not my cup of tea) but this story is absolutely heart warming. Although sometimes sad, the way their relationship is strong and capable of turning into better men is abolutely wonderful. Like the commenter below said, you have a natural talent for writting and you should continue. Well done!

Beautiful! Just beautiful!

I'm not going to lie, this isn't my style. I don't particularly care for slash at all, but that doesn't take away from your gift as a writer, just my view of the story. The slash part made it difficult for me to read because (not that I have anything against gays) I don't particularly care to read about guy on guy. Anyways, you have a talent as a writer and I encourage you to continue writing.

Okay, I love the fireworks metaphor, the dream, and the picture metaphor! Amazing! Can't wait for the next chapter! :-)

I loved it so much I just finish chapter 6 and it made me feel like crying. This is beautifully written. The layout is also brilliant with the stars, it is genius. I can't wait to read more of this. I also really didn't see it coming, you caught me off guard. I must say that I also really like the character Keeton, he is a brilliant main character. Please continue.

I hadn’t expected this to be so heart-wrenching but I was in for a surprise! Michael and Keeton are absolutely adorable together and their relationship and characterization is written so well. Michael’s struggle with his family is heartbreaking but at the same time interesting to read, and the way that Keeton saves him from himself is inspiring and beautiful. Though it was disgusting the way that Keeton’s dad reacted to his and Michael’s relationship, I have hope that it’s all gonna work out – after all, isn’t that what Michael told Keeton earlier in that chapter? ;) Your writing is so clear and easy to read, and I’m hooked!