Claire is not Here. - Comments

It was a little confusing at first, but in a marvelous way that makes figuring it all out so enjoyable. The whole thing was quite heartbreaking :( it reminds me of this book "If I Stay", though the plots are pretty different lol overall this is a marvelous piece of work and I love love love it being only in dialogue, you pulled it off so well!

Awh man, this was kinda heartbreaking to read.
I liked it though. I've never read a total dialogue only piece, but you pulled it off great.
It was so sad though. My heart breaks for Elliot, seems like he suffers from dementia or is in denial that his love is gone.

You did a fantastic job on this. My only complaint is the layout, the content box just seems too wide. Everything else is great, though!

At first, when I found out that this was dialogue only, I was thinking “How’s that going to work?” Somehow, you’ve managed to make it work. The reader can tell exactly what’s happening, despite the fact that there no explanations. The characters are telling the story throughout their conversations, through what they say. It’s a really cool idea. I bet if I tried to write something like this, I’d totally butcher it. The ending made me sad though. Elliot is in the mental hospital, just talking to a table, and Claire is dead. The Claire that he imagines himself talking to says she wants him to move on; perhaps in his subconscious, he knows that her needs to. I liked this.

You are quite the unique writer! (That is a MAJOR compliment! Haha just making sure you know!) I understand other readers think it is a bit confusing, but if we COMPLETELY understand everything about a book, where's the fun? It's quaint, unique, and your title really drew me in. I love the names you've chosen and I really like what you're doing. Never, ever, stop writing!

God Bless,

Olivia

You are quite the unique writer! (That is a MAJOR compliment! Haha just making sure you know!) I understand other readers think it is a bit confusing, but if we COMPLETELY understand everything about a book, where's the fun? It's quaint, unique, and your title really drew me in. I love the names you've chosen and I really like what you're doing. Never, ever, stop writing!

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Er, right off the bat, the photo used in the opening page bothers me because it has a watermark on it.
Okay, I love this. The fact that it's only dialogue makes it a little difficult to understand, but I think it really adds something to the story. You're never certain exactly what's going on and in this plot it's perfect.
Very interesting idea, I'm quite curious to see where it goes!

Never in my life have I seen a story that was all dialogue before. It would never have worked had your characters not said each others names so much.

For a while, I couldn't tell what the reason was for the back-and-forth. Honestly, I just wanted to know why she had to go so badly.

Guess I found out, eh? Brilliant end. I dug the unexpected ending.

I'm not going to lie I was nervous about reading a story that was only dialogue but your story was really good! It was interesting how you ha the story progressively get more and more second using before finally revealing the truth. I actually thought Clair was there at the beginning (I should have known based on the title :-P). Really great story!

I was nervous about this being just dialogue, but I enjoyed it! I was upset for him that Claire was only a figment of his imagination now, well done!

Wow. That was really interesting. In all honesty when I read that it was just dialogue I was hesitate about it but it was really good. Interesting idea and you did a really good job with it!

This is brilliant!! I absolutely loved it, the end was perfect. I actually believed Claire was there...

For being a story with only dialogue, it was fairly interesting. The ending was good, but I didn't feel any emotion when I read it. Maybe because it was only dialogue and it was hard to get a feel for the characters and their emotions. The ending fit well with the rest of the earlier dialogue, though, so good job with that!

*each line. (Mibba won't let me edit my comment, lol.)

I liked the idea. It was really short, though, so there wasn't much room for character development, and so I feel like I couldn't relate to Claire and Elliot enough to feel upset for Elliot. I do like the idea though, and you did a good job portraying it all in dialogue only; in a sense that the reader can easily tell who's speaking each lines. Anyway, good luck for the contest! :)

i really really like this as a short story. generally, i'm not too fond of dialogue heavy pieces of text but as this is an obvious exception i think it works really nicely. it's short, but it definitely packs everything that stories should have in.

I really, really like this! The way that it's only dialogue, gives it a certain feel about it. It's easy to understand, even though there's not back story until you get to the end. Your grammar is fine, too. I love it. :D

I love how this is dialogue only, it really gives you the picture of what's happening without actually giving any picture at all. It flows really well and the ending, although sad, did make me laugh. I see no issues with spelling or grammar, and this sort of idea is really unique and never would have occurred to me in the slightest. Really awesome job with this, good luck in the contest! =)

Actually, the way you formatted it (the "dialogue-only" style of the short story) made it refreshing and different from the rest. It was quite an easy read, and your not giving us any description gives us the freedom to guess what the characters are thinking and feeling. The emotions are raw, and the ending part of the chapter really tugged at my chest. I simply loved this, although to be frank, I did kinda snicker at the "you were talking to that table again. We are removing it from the room now" part xD <3

I apologies in advance for spelling mistakes. I am writing this on my kindle.

I loved this, but I noticed that in the summary you write, "Clarke has spent most of his life with her." Did you mean Elliot?

Also, I agree with chasingstars, you shod explain what is happening brouhaha the dialogue. And I found it very realistic that he was talking to a table because my uncle has done the same... but thanks for a good read.

Oooh, this is for the contest I'm entering as well. :)

I wanted to make a quick note on the summary. I don't think you should explain what's going on in the story, because that defeats the purpose. The challenge was to explain everything solely through dialogue and not give any background information. That leads to a lot of inferring and implication, but it's possible to do!

This is sad, though. I feel like a lot of the dialogue could be longer, and full of more substance, but there is raw emotion here that I like. It's an intriguing idea (and I love how you included the table!) but I would work on filling the story out a little bit more and fleshing out the words.