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  • arye.tyler

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    Like Anchors Away, I really wish this was a full story. It's an amazing and original plot that you've got going here, and I wish it had been longer.

    That being said, I still absolutely love this story. I started reading it thinking that it would be some sappy love story (something I'll admit to having a soft spot for), so the plot twist about Fagan threw me for a loop in the best way possible. Your writing style and descriptions are beautiful, and this story went by far too quickly for my tastes because it was so wonderful.

    Keep up the good work!
    October 7th, 2012 at 02:35pm
  • bob morley

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    Oh man. That random twist about Fagan being Hades was like, super unexpected. I thought the story was great and was a quite original idea. Your writing made it really easy to understand and to get lost in.

    My only criticism is that everything seemed to happen really quickly. Maybe since it's a three-shot it had to be that way, but I almost wished it was a full story so that everything could've taken longer to develop. Nice job and good luck in the contest!
    September 29th, 2012 at 08:35pm
  • Annabelle Graceton

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    Holy crap plot twist! Great story! Totally did not see that ending coming! Love her name, by the way :-p
    June 10th, 2012 at 05:53am
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    Yeah, I seriously did NOT see that one coming. Sure the thought crossed my mind where Fagen was a reaper, but never a god. Much less Hades. This one threw me for a loop and I liked it. :)
    June 10th, 2012 at 04:29am
  • daisyfairy

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    okay firstly, I DID NOT SEE THAT COMING LIKE OH MY GOD, i thought it was going to be some sweet little love story, like the layout and stuff, but wow. just wow. it was great. i really enjoyed it, it seemed to go quite fast, but i still really liked it, and just. woah. the twist was SO GOOD, kudos to you. <3
    June 9th, 2012 at 08:01pm
  • xoxoChristina

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    Woah. This story definitely had a twist I didn't see coming. I really like this so far. Slightly confused at the moment, but I like it. Subscribed....
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:37am
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    Okay that was much better than I thought it would be. Amazing actually. I understand her feelings of wanting to be out in the world instead of stuck in the house taking care of her kid brother when the parents should be home. This story has caught my interest and I shall definitely be subscribing.
    June 9th, 2012 at 04:53am
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