You're My Kryptonite - Comments

I come from comment swap.
Firstly, I know you probably don't want to hear it, but I hate 1D. In saying that though, I understood everything in here, there aren't any inside jokes and stuff like that, so I was thankful for that. The drama thrown in here is good, it kept me interested, your descriptions are very good too. Over all, as much as I hate to admit it, I liked this One Direction and all. Good job!

Well, I am not from comment swap : ) and I love it.
I think it's well written and you do a wonderful job of moving the story along.

xx

Comment swap.

I don't like One Direction, so the story doesn't really catch my interest. But if I think of them as just like...random people it lets me pay more attention to the story line. I like the drama about the kids drawing it was unexpected and that's always good. I do feel that the romance starts too soon, he sorta like loves her at first sight and that doesn't do it for me. None the less, this is a good story with a good plot but it doesn't suit my personal taste. Keep it up, and enjoy writing!

I've come from comment swap. (I'm sorry, it bought me back)

I apologise, but I really don't like One Direction, so the story in itself doesn't interest me. However, I adore your layout and I love the fact that you spell fairly well and are good at using correct grammar. People who don't use correct spelling and grammar annoy the crap out of me.

Good luck on the rest of the story, and on future stories.

I've come from comment swap.

I apologise, but I really don't like One Direction, so the story in itself doesn't interest me. However, I adore your layout and I love the fact that you spell fairly well and are good at using correct grammar. People who don't use correct spelling and grammar annoy the crap out of me.

Good luck on the rest of the story, and on future stories.

I'm so sorry, comment swap keeps bring me back here.

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

The layout is nice and simple, I like it that way. The story was very well written, full of detail and description. The summary pulled me in right away, curious about the rest of the story, which did not disappoint. The story flows very nicely and the chapters are good lengths. Overall, it's an awesome story! Keep up the great work!

why does everyone always make Zayn mean...? but I do like it. very nice plot twist.

This story is off to an okay start. Make sure you add conflict into this. No story is this perfect the entire way through, every story needs a tragic accident, or huge problem. Also, make sure you not the changes in the Point Of View. But other than that, this is very promising! Keep writing!

This story is off to an okay start. Make sure you add conflict into this. No story is this perfect the entire way through, every story needs a tragic accident, or huge problem. Also, make sure you not the changes in the Point Of View. But other than that, this is very promising! Keep writing!

I love One Direction, like, a lot. But the fact that your character's and the whole story seems so perfect right now is a really big turn off. Try and put some variety problems in there (she doesn't get along with one of the boys?).

And I'm wondering what would make Harry say she's so different? I'm just wondering.

This was pretty good, I didn't find many problems with it at all, except in the first chapter when Harry offers to help Adelaide, you say "he picked up my cousin..." but earlier you refer to her as Adelaide's sister, so you may want to fix that one inconsistency. Also, when you switch point of views, you may want to note the change just because at first it can be a little confusing for the reader.
the only other thing I found was how quickly the story was moving in relation to the relationship between Harry and Addie. However, all in all it is a very good story with excellent amounts of description. I'm very glad to have come across it in the comment swap!

Hello! I've just finished the first chapter of your story and would like to address a few things. I think overall, the story sounds a little too perfect. Like things just happen in the perfect time to create the perfect situation... if you know what I mean. For example

"What I enjoyed about my apartment complex is that there were rooms that they rented out as hotel rooms. I've met a lot of amazing tourists and have made many friends because it's the cheapest rooms, as well as the "fanciest" in the entire city. "

I dunno, it just seems as though this is too convenient. I think that if it is the fanciest hotel, then it definitely wouldn't be the cheapest. Unless it was the nicest for the price.

I also definitely would never let a stranger hold my sister, especially if she were drunk; or let him in my apartment for that matter. I also have to agree with visualprince in that they are moving pretty fast.

I do think that you have a strong writing sense and your story was easy to read through and I didn't get caught up on any grammatical errors or weirdly phrased sentences. I have to say that it wasn't boring to read and am glad that I was chosen to comment on this one for the comment swap.

Of course these are all just my opinions and you are welcome to either take them or leave them, but please continue writing, as I feel that you do have talent!

awww this is cute!

All I can think when I'm reading this is that they move FAST like really fast hahaha

Still, it's an interesting story. Looking forward for more :)