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  • kmblue

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    I'd love a sequel to this, someday. Very well written, very realistic and I love the shades of gray in it. Love it.
    April 30th, 2013 at 05:00am
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    So I'm obviously late to the party on this, but I just read it and I really liked it! I like how the mistake is made by Matt, someone who most of us probably couldn't imagine doing that. I like Sara's uncertainty about what she should do by the end of it, because it's like real life, nothing is just black or white. Loved the flow and the way you ended each little section. I actually really enjoyed the darkness of this story. I hope to read more from you in the future. :)
    March 4th, 2013 at 10:44am
  • life.in.technicolor

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    I really liked this! I would love to read a sequel!
    November 16th, 2012 at 09:46pm
  • fangirl1999

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    I really enjoyed this. There aren't enough Avs fics on Mibba. I hope you write more to this story! I'm glad that Sara didn't sleep with Ryan, it was too soon.
    September 9th, 2012 at 04:52am
  • No.Thought.Of.Me

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    This is just.. ugh!! I love Mattie like a little bro, so to think of him doing something like that, even in fiction, is just mindboggling. But that Factor is there to pick up the pieces is a not-so-surprising pleasantry. He fits the knight in shining armour well. The only other person i'd wish to be in his shoes would be OB, but he gets in a lil anger himself so it's all good.
    You are a fantastic writer and I hope there will be more to read from you!!
    June 19th, 2012 at 12:18pm
  • Bismuth

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    I really liked this story. You really get to understand every character whether you agree with what they are doing or not.
    June 11th, 2012 at 05:14am
  • billet-doux

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    Can I just take a minute to say that you need to post more on Mibba? Your writing is immaculate and I want to read everything you've written. Please please please with a cherry on top DO NOT stop writing. You are too good to not get the love and credit your writing deserves.

    This one shot is perfect. The transitions are spot-on and the change in mood makes me want to dance with joy. The end of this is great for a one shot, too. I want to know what happens with this triangle, I want to read more! I love your description of emotions and the dialogue works so well with everything else in the story. Awesome, awesome job. Thank you so much for joining my contest! xo
    June 11th, 2012 at 03:26am
  • PKS_

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    This was so well-written and I wish it wasn't just a one-shot! Poor Sara :( It's so hard to think of Duchene as a douche--he seems so sweet! Nevertheless, I'm Team Ryan, too haha ;)
    June 10th, 2012 at 07:20pm
  • letterheadloyalty

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    You did great! What a love triangle to be caught in! She does indeed have options though! I'm team Ryan in this one. :) Good luck in the contest!
    June 10th, 2012 at 01:40pm