Love & Toast - Comments

The first thing I thought when I saw the title and the layout was, “this is going to be original and cute.” And it was. The dialogue was cool. I like how you used it to replace description by having a character describe what they were seeing. I love how light-hearted it is, and the character interactions are so adorable. I was just, Omg this is so cute, it makes me want to just roll around and drown in memories of their endearing conversation. I like the part where they continued their conversation and how playful the characters are. They match so well. x]

I liked the idea of having just dialogue but I'm someone who lovesss descriptions. But that's just me. c: Anyway, I still really liked the dialogue; it was sweet, fun, silly and just perfect. It all flowed perfectly. The characters were hilarious and silly. Overall, this flowed perfectly and was a great read! (:

Aww, that was cute.

I like how you went about this - all dialogue, and describing things through dialogue. I found the simplicity of the piece the most enchanting thing about it, though. It was easier to connect to, whereas in other stories you wade through a sea of filler words and descriptions.

I like your characters; they're both so silly! I feel that even though we only had dialogue to go off of, you still gave us valuable insights into their lives and personalities. You handled this kind of challenge much better than I would've, and I appreciate that.

The ending was very cute. I remember the uncertainty of saying it the first time; would they accept you, or be frightened off? I really liked this.

(: Good job.

This was so wonderfully written! I really like how smooth the conversation was. I could really feel the characters, the emotions, the situation.

In fact, it's inspired me to want to write something also only consisting of speech! :3

(I'm just someone who reads contest entries for fun, btw.)

I'd just like to point out- one of the rules of the contest is that the two characters talking are supposed to be in a room, with a table... But isn't this a conversation over the phone? Just thought I'd bring it up in case you didn't notice the rule or something.

Aww. This was really cute. :) I especially like Jake's humour. The way each of them spoke in this conversation - you gave them a lot of character; it really made them feel real, in my opinion. Lovely job! Oh, and good luck for the contest! :D

I love the layout with the background. The dialogue between the couple was sweet and flirty, and just all around cute. You have an excellent way of writing between the two, and how care-free the conversation was. Awesome job, keep it up!