Hugely Invisible. - Comments

I'm at loss for words with your story. I have my own problems with my body and any girl could relate to this -whether or not they're overweight. I guess it's just self-esteem.

I wanted to cry but I couldn't. To be honest, it was very emotional for me to read this but I'm somewhat a hard person to cry on such things. This story, however, made me teary-eyed so lucky you!

It was a strong concept, what you used here. Any girl/guy would be able to relate. You said that it's not your best story, but I'm saying it's one of the most emotional, raw and beautiful stories I've read here on Mibba.

The way you've written this story is absolutely flowing. It's not as poetic as any author would write but it's original. Your writing in this story made it seem raw and strong.

Anyway, that's all I wanted to say. I'm glad to have read this. Even if it was a sad story, it had somewhat given me hope and strength.

This was definitely a good read. The description was both a strength and weakness of this piece. I felt like some of the description was a bit stifling to the writing, and I feel like to remedy it it could be good to watch out for the overuse of adverbs. Like, in the beginning, you wrote "Her simple green eyes" as a girl with brown eyes, there is nothing simple about green eyes! I would have left it at just green eyes or just eyes.

Other than that, this piece flowed very well and the subject matter is very relatable for all girls of all sizes, and perhaps even to dudes as well. I know in high school I was never comfortable with myself. Even with the strived for "hourglass figure" and curves, people still made fun of me and cut me down because of how I looked. Things like that make a person so self conscious and self destructive. It really speaks to a lot of people, and I think anyone can put themselves in the protagonist's shoes.

I really like this and can definitely relate, I was only 10 but I was overweight and in my neighborhood back then it was harsh, at 11 I started to quit eating and lost the weight but lost me health; so I can definitely relate to her feelings.

This is beautifully written I'm not really sure what else to say except... wow...

I really liked this. I feel that it can easily relate to a number of people, boys and girls alike. What I really liked about this was the amount of detail that was littered throughout the story. You didn't just focus on the main characters looks, but the looks of the guy and the things around her. I thought it was really neat.

But anyway, I really enjoyed reading this. Fantastic job!

Wow. Like many of the other people here, I feel like this tells my life story. I mean, every detail. I can related to practically everything.

This was... I don't even know what to say, it was beyond amazingly written. You're probably one of the best writer's I've seen on here since I became a member (which was in '08 or '09), I'm not lying!
I can relate to this girl so bad that it hurts, but it's the real life, unfortunately.

But girl, really, this was unbelievable amazing! Keep on going!

Not your best story? This was a really good story. This is... wow. I don't hardly ever read a story from a bigger girls view point... and it's sad, but I can really relate to the raw feelings of not feeling right in your own skin. This is just so very good, I loved it, and it was actually emotional for me to read. -whistles- I don't know what to really say, just good job, great job really.

I wish there was more to this, I loved it! C:
It is sad though, and I relate to how she feels at times :c. For some reason I hope for a continuation, a happy ending for her I guess xD. She deserves it :).

Beautiful story. I admit this is how I feel a lot of times... a lot being almost everyday...

Wow... I dealt with this too... years of an eating disorder and I'm still dealing with my issues. It was so real... I kinda wanted the continuation of this *shrug* I loved the brutal honesty of her thoughts about herself, how he doesn't really care about her... So tragically beautiful.

This is such a truthful and beautiful story. I loved it.

Oh my god... This was incredible.

Well, hello again, dear. :) I was surprised to see that I'd gotten another of your stories on this Comment Swap mechanism - and I can't be more glad that I did!

This story was absolutely beautiful. Though it may not have been 85 chapters long, or included line after line of dialogue, or anything of that complicated sort, it was exquisitely written. It was poetic (no pun on your username intended), it was purposeful, it was honest, it was, as you said in your author's note, real, and it hit home. It really, really, really hit home.

There are no words for how much I felt that I could relate to this young girl. And something tells me that was somewhere along the lines of what you were hoping for. Honestly, I really, truly enjoyed this, and I hope beyond hope that she is proven wrong; that that boy on the bus finally does speak up and say something. Who knows? Maybe he's not like the rest of them... Maybe he'll be different and see past her outer appearance.

But honestly, this moved me beyond belief. Holy shat.

You, my dear, are an amazing writer.

(Yes, I did just say "holy shat". I don't really know why, it could be because I'm still awake at 6am... but holy shit.)

What can I say, this little story here has really had an effect on me. Perhaps because I can relate so closely to the girl whose weight determines so much of how she feels.

Again, you really are a wonderful writer (with rad taste in music, if I do say so myself ;) ) and I will most definitely become a regular reader of your stories.

Thank you for entering Comment Swap around the same time I did, or I would have missed a really great opportunity to read something wonderful. <3

Molly

My god. You were right about it being "real." It was like ... like reading my own autobiography, to be honest. It was very intimate and detailed and it was pretty perfect in terms or depicting the emotions and thoughts of girls who actually go through this. Amazing job, honestly. The lack of dialogue, for some reason, made it even all the more better as well.

Honestly, I thought that was really incredible. You're right about this story being so real. I felt like I was reading my own diary entry. The feelings you present here are so real and believable. I really have no complaints about this story other than that I want more. This was such a joy to read! That last line, "One that she wanted with every inch of who she was" is literally breath taking. I'm completely in love with this story. It is perfect. <3

I liked this a lot, particularly the perspective which appears incredibly real and relatable, and the style of the writing caught my attention quickly. The layout is a little distracting, in my opinion, but other than that I really did enjoy the story.

I really, really liked this. It reminded me a bit too much of myself, but it was still very well written and awesome~