Kiss and Tell - Comments

they're gonns get std's but they take meds... then they're gonn have a threesome with josh en dan gets knocked up :)....is that gonna happen??

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Um, I have to agree with DeadRoseCircus here, your grammar kind of sucks. You could really benefit from a beta. The plot could be good if you learned how to use punctuation. Maybe listen more in English class?

If you improved your grammar, this could be a good story. Please do.

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Okay. Firstly. The first paragraph is one sentence. The second paragraph is one sentence. The third paragraph is one sentence. The fourth paragraph is one sentence. None of them use proper grammar and they all start with 'I'.

The plot could be decent, but the massive errors in grammar and flow make it almost painful to read.

I don't mean this to be mean or rude, but I believe everyone is entitled to an honest comment, and I'm not afraid to give it to them.

So brush up on your grammar and sentence structure and you could be a good writer.
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liking it so far

You have me interested and hooked. I hope to get more of this :)