Somebody That I Used to Know - Comments

I really like this story. It's nice and refreshing compared to the stories I'm use to reading. I like how you kept them from confronting each other until the end. It was very realistic, however at the very end I didn't like so much. The call me maybe thing was kind of leading to a new story, you know? Do you plan to do one?

You need to space out your paragraphs more. There should be one line of space between each paragraph and lines of dialogue. It's a rule on Mibba, I think.

"You'd think she's be a bit more mature about all this. He thought, watching her carefully from his table across the room." I think that would look better as "You'd think she's be a bit more mature about all this, he thought, watching her carefully from his table across the room." Just a suggestion.

""BECAUSE SHE'S MY GIRLFRIEND." Mark shouted. "I LOVE HER, AND I WANT TO SEE HER RIGHT NOW. RIGHT NOW, AMY."" I don't think the typing in caps is necessary. It seems unprofessional and doesn't tie in well with the mood. Perhaps you could find another way of emphasizing the dialogue? Exclamation points could help.

I do like the idea, though. I think it fits well with the song and I like how you gave the characters their own unique background. I don't see anything wrong with the idea part, but the actual writing needs some brushing up. Good luck!

Firstly, I LOVE the layout, Very suave and sophisticated. Secondly, this song is so good, and the way you interpreted it was interesting. The passages in italics are flashbacks, I take it? Also, the status is hilarious. Love it love it love it!

This is really good. I love this song and I love the way you interpreted it, you really did it justice. I loved the way you presented their history gradually and wove it into what was happening at the party and the ending was perfect.

This was really well written and I loved it(:

i haven't read the schapter yet, I just love the status. Hahaha