July 28th, 2012 at 06:23pm
My Only One - Comments
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merp. this is cute. update!July 28th, 2012 at 04:57am
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update soon!July 16th, 2012 at 05:22am
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aw jack :') more pleasee :DJune 30th, 2012 at 07:47pm
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Love it! Jack is so sweet:)June 29th, 2012 at 12:57am
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I liked this update! Can't wait for moreJune 28th, 2012 at 06:25am
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Hey. I love this so updateJune 28th, 2012 at 12:57am
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update soon pleaaaase :DJune 27th, 2012 at 07:11pm
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update soon pleaaaase :DJune 27th, 2012 at 07:11pm
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Love it! Update please:)June 27th, 2012 at 06:46pm
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Can't wait for the date! :)June 20th, 2012 at 07:32am
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That was too cute!!!!!!June 19th, 2012 at 06:28am
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Adorable!!! Please keep updating more!! I love this :)June 19th, 2012 at 03:54am
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I would really like to see how this turns out!! :)June 18th, 2012 at 07:53am
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Agh, I like this a lot:)June 18th, 2012 at 05:32am
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I enjoy this story. It's off to a good start. I do have a few suggestions, but they're just minor things that aren't even that important. Anyways, you seem to throw in a lot of random things, like weird things going on around the characters that are added for comedic relief. They can be nice to read every once in awhile, but I think they should be cast aside sometimes and instead you can describe more of Rachel's emotions. You've never really gone into detail about her feelings for Jack and you may want to describe their relationship a little bit more. Those are only my personal ideas, but the story is off to a nice start! Update soon!June 17th, 2012 at 05:21am
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Love this chapter:)June 15th, 2012 at 11:44pm
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Please update soon! I really like this story.June 15th, 2012 at 05:06pm
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Keep! I like it!June 14th, 2012 at 05:17am
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This is good, don't trash it! I can't wait for more :)June 14th, 2012 at 04:39am
In terms of your wtiting however it's easy to follow and I didnt notice many mistakes, although ( and I'm going just by the first chapter) you use a lot of short sentences rather than using compound sentences which may be more appealing...
Good luck with your writing :)