If This Was A Movie - Comments

Oh god! That was so sad! It scared me even more though because as soon as you said he was shot the freakin cat jumped on my lap with loud meow and I jumped, knocking over the laptop on my lap and nearly falling out of my chair. Darn cat.
But great short story! Oh god, I cried. <3

a short and amazing story. man it made me cry! :') xoxox

Wow. LOVE this story. I definitely think you should continue adding on to this! ..and if you do i'll be the first to read it!

Hey, I like this story :) You wrote a good details on every situation, and I could exactly imagine how the story's going. I just think you should try to use a custom layout for this story so the readers will have their first impression even before they read the story :) (Sorry if you didn't get what I'm saying because I'm also confused how to tell it to you hehe)

I really enjoyed this, the first part of the story, the coffee shop bit was just detailed enough to make it adorable and allow me to really get into it, but it wasn't overly detailed. It was a really sweet story and the main character had a lot of depth and was very three-dimensional. :)

I'm actually rather fond of this. Your writing style is interesting, and you can actually feel emotion in this. With most fanfiction, especially involving insanely attractive band guys, the leading girl always has things go her way. Usually, they're complete Mary Sues. But you actually gave Ashley purpose, and depth, which is rare in this kind of story. I adore it. And, despite the fact that I hate getting emotional, I was almost in tears while reading this. I honestly recommend writing more stories in the near future.

So I like the fact that this has Ronnie Radke, as he is one of my favorite singers, but I had a few issues while reading this. Your sentences were a bit too choppy and short and I felt like there could have been more detail. There were also a few sentences that had commas in the wrong places, which always throws me off when I'm reading.

Alright, so... I couldn't get past a certain part. The story itself was decently written and the coffee shop scene was really adorable, but once I got to the end of that part, I just couldn't go any further. I'm sorry. Good job on the story, though.

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THANK GOD.
I FINALLY GOT A RONNIE RADKE STORY.
OMFG.

BRB. NOW I ACTUALLY HAVE TO GO READ.

Omg....it took me ten minuted to read this and I completely bawled like a baby for atleast 9 minutes and 45 seconds if it. X.X T.T I feel so fuckin bad for Ashley, and you really should continue this, I'm positive that I'll hurt as bad as Ashley does ever chapter. )': Poor Ashley. D':

I am literally bawling my fucking eyes out right now! So fucking unbelievably cute, and sad and GAH!!! You should really make it into a longer story! Make me cry all over again!

Oh my goodness. I didn't see that coming, and honestly, I nearly cried. You're an amazing writer, and I seriously hope to read more of your work soon!