Secrets. - Comments

I was pleasantly surprised with how the story is going, I was expecting something highly cliche and overly done but you've done a beautiful job and I'm really looking forward to the rest of the story to unfold. I love the characters so far, how you've described and painted with details. Your writing is beautiful. Keep up the fabulous work, dear.

I really like how this story began, basically telling the facts about his surroundings without really giving anything else away about his life other than that he recently moved to America. There was no reason as to why he moved, or anything else about him, which, of course, is exactly what you were striving for.

I'm so curious to know what exactly he is hiding. In the second chapter, I totally thought that he wasn't a human, but, according to the last sentence, he is. It's obvious that he has some sort of powers or something because he can easily get people to forget about him if he really wanted to, but I can't be too sure of the specifics. Anyway, so far, I have really enjoyed this story; it is full of mystery and surprise, which is something I love to see in stories.

I really like this story :O
Even though it's on hiatus I would love to see some upcoming chapter.
I really enjoy the characters and your writing style.
I like how you describe things and I'll be sure to check in up on this story every once in a while :3
Good job!

i wanna see Kieran gimme a link to a pick he sounds interesting of course your story is great and im defiantly subscribed i want to know more

Ok well after reading this I really wanna know more about this guy, which I guess was your goal. I think you did a very good job of telling just enough to get the reader interested but without telling so much that I don't need to read anymore. One thing to improve on is minor grammar things like run on sentences but it isn't so bad that it detracts from the story. One thing I didn't like was the lack of description once he went outside. I liked the description in the house, but that is just me I like to see everything xD anyways keep writing I'm sure subscribing.

I love the way you write. It's the perfect balance of details and action so that the reader is never bored. Your summary really grabs the readers attention, and I'm honestly very curious about Kieran. He sounds a little Gary Stu, handsome and mysterious and rather well off, but at the same time, Kieran seems like an exception to the rule, someone who fits the classic definition of dreamy while being anything but. I'm really excited to see where this story goes. I will be subscribing to this, and recommending it as well.

From your first chapter id like to know more about Kieran, you have a really great style and this should definitely be updated frequently!! the first chapter is a great introduction and i would reaally like to read more, seriously. this is quite good :) update soon!