Interesting story you've got here. I'm curious to find out what happened with Ashleigh's parents and Mason. You said crash, but haven't elaborated yet on what happened exactly and who Mason is. And then there's John. Curious about what happened between them to make them so kcdildjkkekd with each other (I didn't know how else to describe my thoughts there so I just hit random keys). I loved the scene when the guys were all just staring at her. It made me laugh. Typical boys :-p You've got a couple of spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but nothing too noticeable. You've got a great start to your story here, though I'm curious. Is this supposed to be a fan fic? Because I don't recognize who you are using :s But anyways, good job and best of luck to you on your writing.
I loved the scene when the guys were all just staring at her. It made me laugh. Typical boys :-p
You've got a couple of spelling and grammatical errors here and there, but nothing too noticeable. You've got a great start to your story here, though I'm curious. Is this supposed to be a fan fic? Because I don't recognize who you are using :s But anyways, good job and best of luck to you on your writing.