I'm here from comment swap. Most people will probably read the first chapter and comment, but I chose a random one in the middle. I think it's pretty decent. Work a little on your punctuation and don't make sentences so choppy; also, slightly longer chapters would be nice. However, I like the plot of the story and I'm glad you haven't given up on it, as so many authors seem to do! :/ Keep it up!
July 4th, 2012 at 11:57pm