Thanks, my computer doesn't have spelling on. So it's hard. It's an old computer. But thanks. I am at some point going to go through it and corrected stuff. :)
June 17th, 2012 at 06:26am
I'm not trying to be mean, I swear, but may I suggest a spell check? Even the status of the story is 'injoy' instead of 'enjoy'. You haven't put capital letters in when saying 'I', and not even at the start of scentences. I'm not saying it's not ok to to make mistakes, (I mean my story has loads!) but it's a little hard to read.
Example:
When I was young, I had a dream of making it big in the music career. Now I'm living in LA, the land of muse and spirit. My band and I caught a plane here a week ago.
Now compare this with the first few scentences of your story, and it's a lot easier to read. Trust me, I'm not a bitch, I wouldn't waste my time writing this out if I didn't think this story had potential.
I hope you take my advice, you have a great story line. Good luck! xxxx