Comment Swap!! I really love all the detail, and the chopped sentences at the end of the first paragraph are perfect. The detail of the mannequin is really vivid and gives me a great image of how it looks and how the aura is around it. And the more complex words are awesome too and makes the story that much better, pulsating, marmalade, intangible, they are all really awesome. Overall I really love this. it sounds like a really long poem to me. and it sounds really amazing. i love it! This was by far one of my favorite things I have read on this site, pure perfection!(:
January 27th, 2013 at 05:14am